Adieu

Just got inspired from - Margaux "My Pleasure"

I was felicitous with my aliveness

With my daughter and wife

We had ameliorate chaffers unitedly,

Fallen love, delectation forever and a day,

I was more felicitous with my aliveness now

It turned out to my wretchedness

Banking some more immaterial in my aliveness

Deep in spite of appearance my warmheartedness

I whilst, I got authentic admirer

But no, we were strangers and still we are

So adieu & continue beaming in your world.

 

Author's Note

Its all thought flow, not in real - Just fiction.
Just need you reviews :)
- Singh :)

Reviews

[one sky]

Hey, Singh. Thanks a lot for the mention here. I don't know that my little poem has inspired you to create a beautiful piece like this.

(Author's note...*friction...do you mean, *fiction?)

Nice images.
The poem is so inspiring. It shows how you love your family and how you would do everything for them. You got an admirer...and now you decide to bid goodbye to her. So good! I salute you for that. Nice decision. You should never try to taste a different "menu" if all the good "recipes" are served at home.

Nice nice nice!

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow! I'm simply speechless dearie, Yes, this one is not real its just some random thoughts. I really appreciate your review on my poem :)
- Cheers!
Singh :)

P.S: Yes you must not taste different menu when you got better recipes/food at home :)
Kudos! :)

Thank for spell check for Fiction :P

[one sky]

Haha! I have some typos in my review, too but I've seen them and checked right now. In this site, we learn from others and we also learn from our own mistakes.

Ide nada!

[Vikrantsingh]

Very well said Dearie :) I really loved you poem and I went back to my old times and got something this. I have to appreciate, your work helped me to get this and yes! i'm pleased to have better friend like you in my friend list :)

- Cheers!
Singh :)

[Titan]

This poem remind me of song good bye my lover good by my friend - james blunt

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Supercop]

Nice choice of picture and loved the way you potrayed
Good bye to old memories.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Cybertooth]

Amazing Adieu.. I felt this excellent .....

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks you so much :)

[Jo]

This poem has a life of its own. All those monosyllabic words create an almost galloping effect that makes you almost breathless, before the last two lines rein it all in.

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow thank you so much Jo - Much appreciate your review on my poem :)
- Singh :)

[Jo]

Hi again Singh, sorry, of course I meant 'polysyllabic words' not 'monosyllabic' (I shouldn't work so late). Anyway, well done.

[KAOlmsted]

Nicely done, Singh, and I love it when other writers here inspire...it is truly what this place should be about.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Kimmer :D
I'm happy to see you back :)

Stay in touch :)
- Cheers!
- Singh :)

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure...and thank you. I will.

[Vikrantsingh]

You're welcome :)

[Ruth]

Oh, this made me feel humbled to have read such tenderness...a good word for your poetry, tenderness! xx

[Vikrantsingh]

Hehehehe thank you PoppySilver, Thanks for marking my poetry tenderness xxxx
- Singh :)

[Ruth]

So welcome xxx

[Vikrantsingh]

:$ My Pleasure :)

[Prritiy]

I whilst, I got authentic admirer
But no, we were strangers and still we are
So adieu & continue beaming in your world.

nice poem, liked it.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Prritiy :)

Cheers!
Singh :)

[Prritiy]

welcome :)

[Astro]

The images are stunning, the words though left me stunned. I'm glad you were just practicing capturing the flow of thoughts and not necessarily trying to paint a realistic picture. Impressive impressionism Singh.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank You So Much Astro *hugs* loved your review and it really encouraged me.
God bless you my friend :)
- Singh :)

[Astro]

Never be afraid to fail, there can be no greater way to learn than through failure and no better feeling when afterwards you learn to succeed because of it.

[Vikrantsingh]

Sure Sir :) Thank You So Much for your help Astro :)
- Singh :)

[smilempsn]

Last two lines came out so nice
'But no, we were strangers and still we are
So adieu & continue beaming in your world.'

Nice write VikrantSingh Parmar :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Dearie :) Stay Blessed :)
- Singh :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Singh, I like this. There's a courage inside of you to tell that word to someone. I admire that characteristic of yours... but I'm not that authentic admirer, huh? Lol

You made the right decision. You are already happy with your life...why should you put yourself in trouble?

Very good piece you have made inspired by another write. Thanks for sharing this.

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes this one was truly inspired and this isn't happened with me :P
I'm happy with my life and wife ;)
I tribute this to - Margaux, She inspired me to narrate this poem. Hopefully you never know when i pick your poem and write something like or less then better than your work :D..

Thank you again dear :) for reviewing my poems and giving your valuable time :)
Cheers!
- Singh :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Aw, sorry. I haven't read your note...Thanks for reminding me.

[Vikrantsingh]

That's Okay :D Hehehehehe :P Well how's life?

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Just fine, though I'm busy now with my job. I have to find time in getting in here. I have 96 read requests and I fear I can't finish reading them all until Saturday. You see, I can't make a new poem until now.

[Vikrantsingh]

Same here I have 62 Read Request :( I wrote poem on phone and send one email to my office id and then share it here :/
Very busy schedule and no time for my baby and wife :(

- Well I'm happy we shared our thoughts and feeling here :)
- Singh :)
Stay Blessed :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Oh, don't say that you have no time for your baby and wife. Remember, if you love them, you'll do everything for them. Besides, your wife will love you more if you let her feel that despite of your busy schedule, you still prioritize them.

More power to you and your family!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Dearie :D
You're such a sweetheart :)
Bless you :)