Gelid Insentient Hands

Sense no Scathe

Sense no Wounding’s

I'm Unceasing ere of reverberate

I didn't detect thee

Trammelling ego into Manifestations

Deeming self-back and nothing to loose

Shut my eyes and tear started falling

I hold my mentum up and here grimace recidivate

I swallowed your old note

Which you left inside my dak (pant)

I looked up and wawled

I asked for you back in my life

You're long gone

You’re already dead & numb

I felt your cold & insensate hands

I looked up and squalled louder

My anguish was so loud

Even god cried with rain water

I had your retentiveness’s

They washed with rain I found

I have noone left now

I lost you and felt that torment

I wish this mishap I could rewind

I desire you back

I desire you alive

Without you I'm already demise

Author's Note

Just went with the flow. Need you review :)

Reviews

[Prritiy]

Even god cried with rain water
I had your retentiveness’s
They washed with rain I found
I have noone left now
I lost you and felt that torment
I wish this mishap I could rewind
I desire you back
I desire you alive
Without you I'm already demise


a painful write, nicely written.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much dearie :)

[Prritiy]

you are welcome.

[smilempsn]

Losing someone is heart breaking.. But we have to live with it...
Thinking over old happy memories can make us happy and sad both at same times...

Wishing them to come back just once... So that we can have a lifeTime together.. But the time already passed..
I too lost my friend three years back, in a car accident. She went to Kerala with her family, everyone got hurt badly and she died.. I wrote one piece for her... May be will share someday.....

[Vikrantsingh]

Oh! I'm sorry to read that, God bless her dear :)
May she rest in peace :)

- Singh :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Very moving, Singh. It's so heartbreaking when someone dear to you had passed away.
I'm so touched with these lines:
"I lost you and felt that torment
I wish this mishap I could rewind
I desire you back
I desire you alive
Without you I'm already demise"

Good job, Singh.

[Vikrantsingh]

Well I'm happy you loved this one ;)
Thanks Dhaye

- Singh :)

[Frieda P]

Such a mournful read, 'Even God cried with rain water'...very affecting my dear Singh.

[Vikrantsingh]

I'm happy you read this one :)
Your review and time is much appreciated Frieda :)

read moreI'm happy you read this one :)
Your review and time is much appreciated Frieda :)

- Singh :)

[Frieda P]

Always my pleasure dear Singh.

[Vikrantsingh]

^ - ^ ^ _ ^

[Astro]

It's not perfect, more like an uncut raw diamond where the more you roll it around in your hand the more you find gem-like qualities. There are some great lines in this one Singh!

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow! Astro thank you so much my friend for such a wonderful review :)
Definitely this makes a lots of sense for me and encouragement.
Your words are really worth on my poems and i really appreciate you time :)

- Singh :)

[Astro]

Cheers. Keep it up.

[Zero_Edge88]

(First Mr. Singh, my condolences to your friend. No matter what, drivers should always look out for people who are on their bikes. They are after all more prone to accidents than anyone. My condolences go out to your friend, the girlfriend and the family. Secondly, here's my review and I hope it'll be something to your view. Thirdly, your lexicon turned my mind on, dictionaries are indeed a great friend. There are few writers I know of in this site that can only do that so without further ado here it is.)

"For what it's worth, the hands that turn my clock around and round I cannot even begin to start reversing them. There is no more knowing what time it will be again when I can look back and say, 'This was a great time my friend.'

To know what will kill you, is to know what you are capable of. I am merely extending my life in this place even longer prolonging that I am alive again but you...you...I feel livid! Livid but I can't! I want to yell at you! I want to serrate that flesh of your...Damn it man!

I don't always have the words for you but when I do I want to just let you know you're here my friend. A teardrop, a bloodline and a star. For a teardrop is what I'd exchange for your smile again. A bloodline of brotherhood to you because you were a brother. A star to know that even in the darkest hours your friendship is one oft gazed on the horizon guiding me back to where you and I first met.

Sadly...

I felt my time with you is but a grain drop on this hourglass."

[Vikrantsingh]

I really appreciate your review Zero :) Thank you so much you took time and read my poem. I'm very disappointed and very sad by the demise of my very close friend. This incident is 4.5 yrs old but still sometimes it rushes back in my blood and I feel the pain and immense stroke of mood swings. The only friend which I could share my secrets and My Happiness and even my sorrows.
He was the only shoulder to my head and where I felt relax and when he treat me one as a brother.
I might find better people who may turn up to best friend but noone can replace him.

Thank you so much Zero :)
Stay Blessed :)
Singh :)

[Zero_Edge88]

=) thank you Sir. It took me a while, real life and other issues get in the way nevertheless I still have to make my rounds.

Ah, I see, wow. My condolences still goes out to your friend Sir. We all have that one friend. Who do we say is the better people to say they would become a best friend immediately when such entitlement belonged to one we already knew in our heart is ours truly. To know we are friends is a blessing but a best one we are far from such endearment. We are two different stars under one night sky whose radiance to each other's affinity is far away.

You're welcome Sir Singh :)
As to you as well :)
Zero :)

[Vikrantsingh]

With pleasure Mate :)
I really felt good and wonderful we have better understanding people on WC. I must say people who all are poet are emotional / sometimes very emotional and this carry along. :)

My Pleasure Bro :)
Singh :)

[Kristin Lee]

Even god cried with rain water...what a powerful line. This piece holds a lot of angst and sorrow. Grief is so crushing, is it not? Good job.

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes Kristin, I'm missing my friend a lot :(
God Bless him :)

- Singh :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

A profound write... very intense pain is felt in your words. Well done!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you Robbie :)
Singh :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My pleasure Singh... :)

[Vikrantsingh]

^ - ^... :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

((((((((((((((((*-*))))))))))))))))

[Vikrantsingh]

:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

[tuvi]

Did you write this thinking of trauma relating to kavi's dad ..... ?? just a mere question ...I am apologetic if I'm wrong .....cos I dono why it lead to that when I read the poem and very related the poem I wrote last week ......

Some of the real touchy lines :

"Trammelling ego into Manifestations "

" I felt your cold & insensate hands

I looked up and squalled louder "

Your work shows that pain and anguish relating to the incident ..and images describe it even better ..

good work keep it up

Love ,
Tuvi

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes! you can say that, but this is more towards my best friend who died in road accident.
I felt very sad yesterday. Thus, I wrote this poem :)

Thanks Tuvi,
Singh :)

[tuvi]

oh the bike incident one??

[Vikrantsingh]

No, he was alone with his friend and meet accident on Kohalpur Highway, was on phone talking to his gf and went on highway and smashed by truck.

[tuvi]

aww ...may his soul rest in peace

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks :) Tuvi

[smilempsn]

The images dishturb me.. Not able to read, as not in the correct mind.. Will review it soon later ..

[Vikrantsingh]

Its fine :) take your time dear :)

[Marie]

I got the sense of thisn without going to the dictionary...

I don't know what "walled" means, but I really like the sound of the word.

[Vikrantsingh]

Its wawled it means scream out loud, thanks Marie :)
I'm happy you liked my poem :)
-Cheers
Singh :)