Gelid Insentient Hands

Sense no Scathe

Sense no Wounding’s

I'm Unceasing ere of reverberate

I didn't detect thee

Trammelling ego into Manifestations

Deeming self-back and nothing to loose

Shut my eyes and tear started falling

I hold my mentum up and here grimace recidivate

I swallowed your old note

Which you left inside my dak (pant)

I looked up and wawled

I asked for you back in my life

You're long gone

You’re already dead & numb

I felt your cold & insensate hands

I looked up and squalled louder

My anguish was so loud

Even god cried with rain water

I had your retentiveness’s

They washed with rain I found

I have noone left now

I lost you and felt that torment

I wish this mishap I could rewind

I desire you back

I desire you alive

Without you I'm already demise

Author's Note

Just went with the flow. Need you review :)

Reviews

[Prritiy]

Even god cried with rain water
I had your retentiveness’s
They washed with rain I found
I have noone left now
I lost you and felt that torment
I wish this mishap I could rewind
I desire you back
I desire you alive
Without you I'm already demise


a painful write, nicely written.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much dearie :)

[Prritiy]

you are welcome.

[Titan]

Even god cried with rain water
I had your retentiveness’s
They washed with rain I found
I have noone left now
I lost you and felt that torment
I wish this mishap I could rewind

Great feelings here you poured well done

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Supercop]

Even god cried with rain water
I had your retentiveness’s
They washed with rain I found
I have noone left now
I lost you and felt that torment

Lived in those lines your friend you missed
that was so true and real

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Tom]

A great out pour of anger/angst in the lines of this poem that contribute so forcefully to its impact !

Well penned !

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Tom :)
I'm happy you liked it :)
Thank you so much for you visit and review on my poem :)
- Singh :)

[Cybertooth]

Amazing loved it :) read/write

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks you so much :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Lots of emotion in this. Great Job

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much BR :)

[Shaun Payton]

Flow is good. The anguished wish we can never bring a loved one back.

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes Shaun, Ones gone is gone forever.

[Shaun Payton]

But what has been lived matters most

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes that true :)

[Shaun Payton]

:).........

[Onku Ghosh]

The anguish of losing a loved one........so vividly expressed. Great job, Vikram

[Vikrantsingh]

Ta Onku :)
I'm happy you liked my work :)

[Jack...]

Very sad my friend. I know this feeling first hand and still many unanswered questions remain. You have captured the feeling of sorrow and loss so very beautifully in your words. It is very obvious this was written from your heart.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Jack :)
Much Appreciated :)

- Singh :)