Love of My Life

Her name is Kavita

I would offer & like to kiss her?

She's sweet as marshmallow

I owe my heart my pulsations

She sprang up dulcet gesture

Which I know that for me

Eyes are big and round

I sprang up it my world

She's got blushful lips

Flaunting my hereafter in it

When they kiss me

I ofttimes miss her!

It has to be the hug which we share

Moreover it’s the dream I care.

She is in my life as love

I kept her to my pith dearie

We had some cherubic memories

I love them to hold dear entire

Her affection/heart is pure as angel

Which drew me to found philia?

Her hair is consecutive

Her voice is like Honey Bee

I simply can't resist her

I won’t find someone like her

Author's Note

Would love to see your reviews on this one :)

Reviews

[Dhaye]

Singh, once again I want to congratulate your wife for having you as her husband. She's really lucky to have you in her life. You're so sweet and romantic.

I just want to give the following suggestions to improve this piece, just little slips you have to fix:
*the title "My Love of life" may sound better if it's "Love of My Life"
*I would offer & like to kiss here?----here - her
*I ofttimes miss me!--------me - her
*Moreover it’s my dream I care.----my - the
*Which drew me to found philia? ------ found - find (? not needed)

Singh, again, this is sweet and romantic. Good job. Keep writing.

[tuvi]

dhaye has done the job of pointing out the slips :)

[Vikrantsingh]

:D hehehehehehehehehe thanks Dhaye :P
I will make those changes sure ;)

Thanks again :)
Singh :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Done made changes :)

[Leigh]

A beautiful love poem, you are making me love this woman too, fantastic job Vikrant

[Cybertooth]

She's sweet as marshmallow
I owe my heart my pulsations
She sprang up dulcet gesture
Which I know that for me
Eyes are big and round
I sprang up it my world
She's got blushful lips
Flaunting my hereafter in it
When they kiss me
I ofttimes miss her!

Great and she loved it a guess

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Supercop]

She is in my life as love
I kept her to my pith dearie
We had some cherubic memories
I love them to hold dear entire
Her affection/heart is pure as angel

This was great love for your wife stay blessed

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[one sky]

This is a very romantic poem. I think this should be read by your wife so that she'll know how blessed she is for having you in his life.

I like the concept and the choice of words.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you Margaux :), i really loved you review and yes she read this :)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Very beautiful poem, as if taken from photo of the memories, and sounds little playful too...The way you describe the charming girl is lovable, even so, I don`t feel some pain of love, nor too strong passions and desire to have her. Just your picture in gentle sensual way a very sweet nature of your love and the moment of your love is like take out of the time flow. very nice, great write! I didn`t met before expression "blushful lips" and like it...
She's got blushful lips
Flaunting my hereafter in it

-nour-
11.06.013

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much dear :)
Much appreciate your comments :) ^ - ^

Thanks!
Singh :)

[Onku Ghosh]

Very romantic!!!!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Mate :)

[Sarmelendez]

Wow that is so sweet to read... that felt as if it came from the deepest part of your heart.

[Vikrantsingh]

Sarah thank you so much :)

[Astro]

This is a beautiful poem. My favorite line is, "She's got blushful lips" this is a really excellent description that gives color to her lips but also gives the reader a vision of someone blushing in the face of tender attraction. On the editing side though, there seems to be a weakness with regard to the use of articles in your poem that if you cleaned that up it would flow even better. Also, some of your verb tenses are off, but the meaning can be understood nonetheless.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Astro :)
You and few more poets keep teaching me more and more every single day :)
read moreThanks Astro :)
You and few more poets keep teaching me more and more every single day :)

Much Appreciated :)
Singh :)