Senescence

Just love to my life

The older I grow
the more I know
we have better chemistry
we have better mystery.

I loved every moment
I lived every moment
I have you in my life
I married you my wife.

We fought for life
we built our life
we're blessed with Aroha
we're blessed with Dia. (My Daughter)

I have my heart
its attached to you
I will never have one
just true and best like you.

 

- Love and Life

Author's Note

Its Love to my life :)

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wow, you taught me two new words today. My dictionary has been staying very busy of late.. lol. With that said, this is a beautiful love poem with passion from the heart. My only suggestion is in the last stanza..

Just true and best like you. - Love and Life

try

as devoted as you.

that wraps up true and best in one word. "Love and Life" do not need to be at the end either as they are understood from the entirety of the poem.

Beautiful job here Singh.. your wife is lucky to have you!

[Vikrantsingh]

Lori just your poems make me to write this thanks again :)

I will cherish your comments forever :)

Cheers!!
Singh :)

[Supercop]

Loved it the way you said this poetry
Love increases as age increases

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Cybertooth]

Truly amazed work my friend this is stunning :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very beautiful poem - tribute to your love and wife. Great funny photo, I like it, really the wife is always close to you, no matter how hard life seems to be, you overcome it together. The most precious is the one, who cares for you, not the one who just want you.

-nour-
June-013

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much :)
Much appreciated ;)

Love your review Sugar :)

[Shaun Payton]

Ah love so depthful it leaves the soul of the heart cherishing each breath.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Shaun ^ - ^

Loved your review :)

Singh :)

[Shaun Payton]

:) you are welcome Singh.

[Vikrantsingh]

:)

[JulieÉmile]

This was so sweet and simple. In such few words, you have expressed a lifetime of love. Heart touching. I feel that in the last line of your last stanza, replacing, 'just' with 'so' will make it more effective and flow better. I also agree with Lori about trying 'as devoted as you' for the last line.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Julie :)
I simply loved your review :)

Thanks & Regards,
Vikrantsingh Parmar

[Kristin Lee]

What a beautiful poem and testiment to the love in (of) your life.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Kristin for reviewing my poem :)

Cheers!!
Singh :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is adorable. Like it, Singh. Thanks for sharing this work. :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Dhaya :)
Love your reviews always :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ahahaha! Wrong name again. It's Dhaye, please....Lol. :)

[Cassie]

Beautiful poem, I enjoyed reading it

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Cassie :)

[Shivam Murari]

Emotions bursting out as ever! You have mixed the chemical and mystical sciences in the correct ratio, Vikrant, making it all so much more effective. Your improvement has be dramatic. Though the repetitiveness is still not completely gone, the flow, the rhyme, the meter, everything is just so nice, indeed!
Very nice poem :-)

[Vikrantsingh]

Loved you review Shivam thanks bro *Hugs*

Made me smile ;)
Singh :)

P.S: Just learning from you guys

[Shivam Murari]

Welcome :-)

PS- Learning from 'you' guys? Does that include me? Are you kidding or teasing?

[Vikrantsingh]

I'm not teasing mate your poems are way better.. I'm new to poems just started after my daughter was born..
I must admit you all guys on this page make sensible chat/poems/stories much better than FB/Twitter.

[Shivam Murari]

Haha! Even I completed one month of writing poems on May 16th. So, technically, I am new to the poetry world either. it is another thing that I have been writing novels, articles, stories for past five years :)

[Vikrantsingh]

I don't have such magical background. I just earn single certification from Oxford University Online Examination Test Clearance.. With 85% that it.. I think positive and you all guys really help me to think such work/poems :)

[Shivam Murari]

Woah! You have studied at Oxford University O.O
Well, I don't have a magical background too. I haven't published any yet, and I am under 18 :P

[Vikrantsingh]

No man not studied but have attended some sessions and passed my exam from India.. My guru's (teachers) were way excellent and help me to push up my knowledge level from 0 to 9. Still struggling to achieve 10 lol...

[Vikrantsingh]

You're under 18 .. Minor :P Gosh! Ah.. i must say.. you have more far better understanding than i possess

[Shivam Murari]

haha! c'mon that's not true. u r a fun guy, we need more people like you in this world happy-go-lucky. And don't worry you will soon reach level 10 :-)
I think you should write comedy poems too :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Really.. I write but they all are pretty nasty so can't share :P

[Shivam Murari]

nasty! Oh God! Well you can put it under Mature section :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Ppl won't like it mate :D

[Shivam Murari]

C'mon, be casual, I upload whatever I write, without caring what would be liked and what not. After all, that is what this site is for. Here we put our work to get it reviewed and corrected.
(This doesn't apply to experienced people like Sami and Jack, who write to entertain people :-) )

[Vikrantsingh]

Hmm yes i have to add some more work.. will do..
I was thinking to write on Brothel :x
Its way touchy topic to discuss and explain :(

I hope, I will make good score and express them proactively.

[Shivam Murari]

:-)

[Onku Ghosh]

Well expressed thoughts.Good!!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Sir :)