Missing Night's

Missing you sweets :*

I'm dreaming looking up at the sky

It’s so high I felt dark n' cry

You might deeply miss me
like I miss myself intensely

 

Very oft I amuse

I see your snap n' defuse

Your eyes are so bright

Like this alone, stupid night.

 

Let me make you feel what? 

I feel inside me but what?

I felt was by pillow

It went way slow.

 

Then I check up at clock

It was all misty and lock

I turned my face down

And went back onto my dream.

Author's Note

Just wrote it..check and pass your review :)

Reviews

[Sugar Plum ♥]

lovely love piece... :) I like the rhymes, you try to be prefect in them! The feeling is of intense loneliness, usually in night, as all thoughts concentrate inside your mind. Sounds like song of absence, it`s hard to miss your beloved, but remember as you said:
You might deeply miss me
like I miss myself intensely

-nour-
June-013

[Vikrantsingh]

Hehehehe thanks Sugar :) Much appreciated ;)

Singh :)

[tuvi]

I am amazed by your words , they are so much of like what I have in my mind ! we are still young and need more focus on our works bet with progressing work I'm sure we can definitely do more better ! you are profound in your work and always caught my eye

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Tuvi ;)
Much appreciate your review and your comments.

I cherish them :)read moreThanks Tuvi ;)
Much appreciate your review and your comments.

I cherish them :)

Cheers!
Smiles & Hugs :)
Singh :)

[Zelle]

superb read!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Zelle
Much appreciated :)
Cheers!
- Singh

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Filled with emotion and desire. I like the feel of hope and wonder. Separation leave us to think and ponder where we could be and are. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Coyote :) much appreciated :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Made some changes
1st Stanza -
You might deeply miss me
like I miss myself intensely

[smilempsn]

hmm changed line.. and font too :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes as you asked :P

[smilempsn]

:P

[Krystal Nicole]

very good write

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks :) KNP

[Akshat♥]

Sometimes i do exactly the same thing lol :D
Some people can stay in your heart but not in your life :)
you always touch my heart with your poems :)
KEep writing !!

Your Friend
Akshat

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Akshat :)

-Singh :D

[Akshat♥]

Take care :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Garner :D

[smilempsn]

phir shuru ho gaye dono ^-^

[Akshat♥]

Garner? lol :D

[Akshat♥]

aisa nhi h smile ji :D

[Vikrantsingh]

:D :P... Its Tag line for Garner na " Take care - Garner "
hehehehehehe

[Akshat♥]

A young woman arrived to her doctor with
black and blue signs of beating.
Doctor, "What happened?"
Woman, "Doctor, I do not know what to
do,
whenever my husband comes home drunk
he
beats the hell out of me, almost killing
me."
Doctor, "I have a really good medication
for it.
When your husband comes home drunk
you
just take a glass of Green tea and start to
gargle and gargle, as much as you can
do�and that's all you have to do"�
Two weeks later the woman returns to the
doctor reborn and with a grateful look in
her
eyes.
Woman, "Doctor, that was a brilliant
medicine!
Every time my husband came home drunk,
I
gargled and gargled with Green tea and
nothing happened! He Has gone straight to
bed."
Doctor, "You see how it helps to keep your
mouth shut?

[Vikrantsingh]

Beat them all Hahahahahahahahahaha :x

[smilempsn]

haawww.... :O :O
was that a warning Akki ?? :O :O

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes a sort of :P

[smilempsn]

haawwwww :(

[Vikrantsingh]

٩(´0ˆ)۶ GN ٩(´0ˆ)۶. Sweets :)

[smilempsn]

hmm.. shubhratrii...... ^-^

[Vikrantsingh]

:)

[smilempsn]

hmm :)

[Akshat♥]

that was a joke to make you both laugh a little...
i guess vikrant ji has liked it...and i think u disliked it..
koi na...hota h :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Hahahahaha ;)

[Akshat♥]

You enjoy the stupid conversation here...isn't it? (Vikrant ji)

[Vikrantsingh]

Pls Akshat don't use ji pls.. you can call me Vikrant/Vicky/Vik... like most of my colleagues do.. i don't mind addressed as Vikrant/vicky/vik.... but ya if some1 calls me Sir/Ji and Aap i feel awkward ..

- Singh :)

[Akshat♥]

haha...fine...sure !! i will remember it now...
So vicky do u enjoy the stupid conversation here?? :D

[Vikrantsingh]

I do very much, its way far better than my BBM conversation.. will all sensible ppl around and talk sense ;)

[Akshat♥]

lol ..so sweet of you to say that :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Welcome Mate :) so what do you do? study or work?

[Akshat♥]

lol...u want to ask everything here?...in open lol :D

[Vikrantsingh]

I hope you are not girl :D

[Akshat♥]

i told u earlier ...my name is akshat rana...from delhi :)
I have completed my engineering from electronics and communication field..
worked as an assistant manager...now i will start mtech soon :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Kya baat hai overqualified :D

[Akshat♥]

and my age is 23.... so any other question ? lol :D

[Vikrantsingh]

no re :P

[Vikrantsingh]

That's all good ;)

[Akshat♥]

haha... thank god :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Roflmao :D

[Shivam Murari]

Too much flirting going on around here? ;-)

[Akshat♥]

haha :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Hahahahhaha not flirting yaar... just asking what's happening ;).. Waise bhi what i will flirt with guy :D

[Akshat♥]

tell shivam? :D

[Shivam Murari]

flirt is not always romantic Vicky :P

[Shivam Murari]

Its simply some sort of a funny easy-going tease, that is a little ... love-inducing? :P

[Vikrantsingh]

;;)... Oh!!.... Good going Shivam :D

[Akshat♥]

Don't try this here shivam...i will tell you a site for that haaha !! :D

[Shivam Murari]

Uh-oh! Did I say something wrong? I am saying a lot of wrong things, out of my excitement today. :D

[Vikrantsingh]

You must be having fun - Akshit.. Shivam its ok chalta hai :D

[Shivam Murari]

Site for what @Akshat?

[Akshat♥]

its 'akshat'...hahahahahahahahahahahhahhahaah :D :D
Everything is okay shivam...we are just having fun here..

[Shivam Murari]

yea. I understand bro, but what site were you talking about? ♥ _ ♥

[Vikrantsingh]

Lol. sorry.. Akshat.. didn't mean to hurt you man. Shivam aur you tell how's life?

[Shivam Murari]

"A tough crowd?" That's my favorite phrase. I speak it whenever someone asks me "Howz life?" :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Lol :P

[Akshat♥]

there is no site...i was just pulling your leg shivam :D

[Akshat♥]

no need to say sorry dear...i am just correcting you :)
I know you have no intention to hurt me :)

[Vikrantsingh]

https://www.facebook.com/vikrantsingh.parmar
add me to you FB page ;)

[Akshat♥]

Change your settings first lol :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Settings ?

[Akshat♥]

fb setting...no option to add u there :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Lol :D

[Vikrantsingh]

wait let me check and make some adjustments :P

[Vikrantsingh]

lol i forgot the settings :/

[Vikrantsingh]

done now try

[Akshat♥]

done!

[Vikrantsingh]

done here too :D

[Akshat♥]

but u r nt replying there lol

[Vikrantsingh]

Im offline now at work :P shall chat later :D

[Akshat♥]

ok :D

[Vikrantsingh]

;)

[Shivam Murari]

so u work too! :P :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes i do.. :P

[smilempsn]

Oh my God..!!
you guys are soooooooo over Girls.. chit chatting..bitching :P n all n all ...read moreOh my God..!!
you guys are soooooooo over Girls.. chit chatting..bitching :P n all n all ...
I got '53 Review comments' ufff..ff maa..
yehh ladkee :P
kinnii chating karte hai :D that too in Review comments :| :D :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Hahahahaha jealoused Ɨƚмм...

[Akshat♥]

:D

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. kuch bhii :P

[Shivam Murari]

LOL that was brilliant Vikky #jealous :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Hahahahaha good morning guys ;)

[Akshat♥]

Gd mrng :)

[smilempsn]

Gud nite all :P
Shivam , now you too are with these guys aa ?? jealous n all ^-^

[Vikrantsingh]

Lol :D check my new poem :P

[Akshat♥]

what do u mean by that "smile" ?

[Vikrantsingh]

addressing whom Akshat?

[smilempsn]

:P well I just meant.. Guys are Guys :P
nothing much Akki ^-^

[Vikrantsingh]

lol :D

[smilempsn]

leaving.. catch u laters guys ^-^ :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Bubye ;)

[Akshat♥]

you can't catch us...we might catch you ;)

[smilempsn]

:P n Why did u said so Akki ???
n here you go Again..!! (remember the topic we were discussing in eve :P )

[Shivam Murari]

Well, you can also join us @smile #jealous and all :P

[Akshat♥]

Bcz we guys r good in catching (we play cricket) :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Roflism =D that was hilirious guys. ;)

[Shivam Murari]

;-)

[smilempsn]

Shivam :O :O .. you too are like these guys aa :|

:P I don't wanna join your guys team, I alone am enuff B-) :P
n Mr. Akki.. you just Play cricket :P But I play and watch too ^-^.. so BEWARE of me :D :D

[Akshat♥]

u can't do both at a time :P (play and watch )lol :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Hahahahahaha

[smilempsn]

I can............
I can 'Watch' the bowler coming towards me with the ball...
and can 'Play' a high Four or Six on that ball :D :P

Don't challenge me B-)

[Shivam Murari]

And I can catch that :P

[Akshat♥]

In that way i can play,watch and make video :D

[Shivam Murari]

:P

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. :P
All of us are sooooo talented :P
Why wasting talent in just Writing.. :P Do sumthing gud for Indian Cricket team..!! ;)

[Shivam Murari]

LOL :P

[Akshat♥]

team is itself talented...they play good when they get money :D

[Shivam Murari]

But we write good, even though we don't get money :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Cricket *angry* Don't discuss Cricket here I HATE THAT GAME..

[Shivam Murari]

Waao! Why bro?

[Vikrantsingh]

Just don't like its all FAKE and NOTHING IS REAL.. SIMPLY DON'T WASTE YOUR LIFE ON SUCH A LOSER'S GAME GOD SAKE *ANGER*

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. :P :P
I toh love IPL's ;) :D :D :D
n its just for ENJOYMENT :P :P

read more..hehe.. :P :P
I toh love IPL's ;) :D :D :D
n its just for ENJOYMENT :P :P

well Akki.... they don't get paid for playing.... now-a-days they get paid for PLAYING BAD..!!
May be you guys can bring this back on track ;)

[smilempsn]

..wOOw.. :P :P This review got more than 100 replies :D :D :D
You are SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO famous VikrantSingh Parmar :D :P :P

[Vikrantsingh]

:P

[Shivam Murari]

@Vicky -
I am not a cricket fan either, but I don't hate it. Its fun to play it once in a while. And I understand the fake nature of the game that you are pointing at, but I am totally indifferent to it :-)

@Smile-
I only like IPL's opning ceremony. Pitbull was boring but I loved Deepika in the ceremony :)

[smilempsn]

@Shivam ..hehe.. :D :P waaahhh..waahh..!! :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Hmm whatever I hate it because ppl say its gentleman game and i can't see single gentleman though

[Akshat♥]

hahaah :D i agree with vikrant here :)
If u want to enjoy cricket just play it...don't watch it...bcz it is all fake..
it is not cricket..it is a money game :D

[smilempsn]

Acchaann.. Then Akki.. when are u coming up to Maharastra.. for playing Cricket :P
Let us see your SKILLS in cricket ^-^

[Vikrantsingh]

:D Hahahahahaha :P

[Vikrantsingh]

True Akshat m/

[Shivam Murari]

haha Akshit :P

[Akshat♥]

spelling..check :P

[Shivam Murari]

LOL thats not an English word so can't do, sorry :P

[Akshat♥]

atleast check my name again..its "Akshat"

[Vikrantsingh]

Me too did this earlier :P Akshit but it was Akshat :P

[Shivam Murari]

I know it is AKSHAT, I was copying you Vicky ;-)

[Vikrantsingh]

Lol.. its high time and i need my weapons up and loaded :D

[Shivam Murari]

dhaye! :P

[Vikrantsingh]

. (҂`_´).

[Shivam Murari]

Chinese?

[Vikrantsingh]

Array its something else, man firing.. autotext in my blackberry

[Shivam Murari]

ow! so u have a blackberry! Nice!

[Vikrantsingh]

Yeah.. it sucks.. man don't bother, buy some real time toy.. S3 or S4.. tell me your requirements I will give you the best choice with you budget :D
I hacked my plan of 399 with 3G services ;)

[Shivam Murari]

ow! :O
Waise my dream mobile is iPhone. Will buy it when I begin to earn ^_^

[Vikrantsingh]

Don't buy, Genuine suggestion :(

[Shivam Murari]

y?

[Vikrantsingh]

Check the Fall test of Iphone you will decide not worth :/
As its way expensive so think before you invest ;)
and many other flaws

[Shivam Murari]

thats in iPhone 5. iPhone 4 was the highest selling mobile in its time.
And when I will buy, tab tak iPhone 6 ya 7 aa chuka hoga

[smilempsn]

:D :D Tum log k dekh k samjhta hai :D :D ................. ki ladke bhi kinnaa baat kar sakte hai :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D

@VikrantSingh Parmar... u n ur hacking :-/ .. AGAIN..!! :P

[Shivam Murari]

LOL! yea... we r good buddies now. if boys dnt know each other well, they don't talk much, but if they r frnds they can break the record of ladies ;-)
Ladies on the other hand can eat everyone's head -__________________-

:P Just kidding :P :P :P

Waise how did u hack bro... u can msg me :P

[smilempsn]

:O :O :O Well I guess, all of u are same..!!
Problems with Girls..!! I doubt you guys now ;) , except VikrantSingh Parmar... that too just coz he has a daughter now :P

[Vikrantsingh]

;) its trick buddy :D
If you use Blackberry then only :P
Waise I would not ask you to buy seriously Iphone do read its review and then jump on IPhone is expensive toy with limited apps not
I would rather go with Android or Microsoft phone decent and great candy :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Oh! i got daughter.. so what, Huh!
Yes I respect Females more than Males.
So Smilespns :P ;) you're welcome ;)

[Shivam Murari]

c'mon, all the good games come to iPhone market first. There is this gaming website, playfirst, that used to be my favorite as a kid. But they switched from PC to IPlatform. Every since then, I have vowed to buy an iPhone for myself :P

@Smile -
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[smilempsn]

well you didn't understood what I said :-/
chaddhoo.. Gotta go.. needa prepare dinner :'(
read morewell you didn't understood what I said :-/
chaddhoo.. Gotta go.. needa prepare dinner :'(

[smilempsn]

n my display name is 'smileMPSN' :-/

[Vikrantsingh]

But again i will say.. decide when you buy such expensive toy... thats my advice...
I used it though works damn slow when you club some games as the processor is still old Dual Core. which sucks..

[smilempsn]

hawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww..... what doest that mean Shivam :'( :'(
Does that mean **beep beep** :-/

[Shivam Murari]

Oh Vicky! You always make my day by messing up with others names/usernames :P

@Smiles-
Prepare dinner? u r married too?

BTW, what does MPSN stand for? My Pony is So Naughty? :P

[smilempsn]

No no no .. :O I am not married :P
But bachelor, who is living far away from family for Work..!!
So needa prepare dinner for myself :) :)

..hehe.. waaahh what a full form you have created ^-^

[Shivam Murari]

LOL. so u r a working lady hehe :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Well its not bachelor for women's its - spinsterhood :P Sugar ;)

[Shivam Murari]

A correction here bro. Spinsterhood is a term used to refer women who have remained single for age beyond convention, like Lata Mangeshkar. Bachelorette (American freestyle for girls like Selena and Taylor) or Maiden (standard English) are the terms :-)

[Vikrantsingh]

Awww :P thanks... sorry again ;) Sugar sorry to you too :P

[Shivam Murari]

Sugar? And u don't have to say thanks and sorry buddy. No thanks cuz we r buddies and no sorry, because there is no reason y u shuould say sorry to me o.O

[Vikrantsingh]

^-^ Hmm yes no sorry no thanks and Sugar for smilempsn, She's cute and way understanding Girl ;) so its just a sign of gesture which i give to girls here on WC .. I use Sweets/Sugar :) thats it

:P

[Shivam Murari]

I thought we use those terms while flirting with girls :P Thats so bittersweet :P

[Akshat♥]

@smile: ":O :O :O Well I guess, all of u are same..!!
Problems with Girls..!! I doubt you guys now ;) , except VikrantSingh Parmar... that too just coz he has a daughter now :P"

Don't add me here... "All are not same" :P

[smilempsn]

waahh :P :P Sugar...sweets.. n u all are the SPices of WC aa :P :P :D :D
@Shivam .. correct padka ;) thatz used for flirting only :P .... Seee See.. VikrantSingh Parmar, is flirting publicly with every girl on WC :P
@Akki :P :P huhh.....!! Better I should not open my mouth on this sentnce of urs ;)

[smilempsn]

@Shivam : yes, I am a working Lady B-) ... Why what did u thought :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Well addressing someone words like Sugar/Sweets doesn't means I'm flirting *talktothehand*
I usually use such words.. with every girl...
I address guys with other words which i can't address here.. Akshat you are smart enuff to understand "Read between the lines"
@ Smile : If you don't like that I will stop addressing you with those so call FLirting Magical words :(

[Shivam Murari]

haha :P

[Shivam Murari]

Anyone excited to watch Yeh Jawaani Hai Deewani?

[Vikrantsingh]

Nope Deepika Yaaksssssss

[Vikrantsingh]

I can't waste my money on beginners who can't even act properly and don't know what to speak and where.. though

[smilempsn]

By God..!! VikrantSingh Parmar.. you took everything soooooooo seriously ^-^
Everyone was just joking.... when they said on topics like 'Flirt...sugar'... Moreover, I ....hmm call me anything you want :P but keep it to decent side :P
(lets keep the air nice n friendly around here :) )

@Shivam ..hehe.. May be I will watch..!! Due to Ranbir Kappor ;) .. he has so much grown in his acting...from Rockstar...Barfi ^-^

[Akshat♥]

lol ..@ smile...if u want to keep the air cool between frnds than try to watch your words before saying... :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Pls no personal fights :/

[smilempsn]

ohh okies... Sorry... won't dishturb you guys... Carry on with your friendship..
Sorry again, if I had been a reason for anything of this....
Godji Bless you All :)

[Akshat♥]

hahaahahahah :D

[Akshat♥]

no need to sorry lol...i can also pull your leg ;)

[Vikrantsingh]

Smile its not about talking and all, its just don't fight :P
Everything is ok here don't worry..
We were friends are friend and will remain friends ;)

[Akshat♥]

totally agree with vicky ;)

[Vikrantsingh]

Yesh! We need to be together and stay friends ;) Guys and Girl ;D

[Shivam Murari]

Woah! A lot has happened over here. I would dedicate two lined here
"Oh! A simple complication, miscommunication,
Leads to fall out.
So many things that I wish you knew
So many walls I just can't break through."

I think none of us (Except me of course :P ) has a good sense of humor :P :P :P

PS - Ranbir is brilliant, I loved his acting in Barfi and Rockstar. Deepika is improving too. Besides, she looks hot ;-) Music is compelling, Madhuri Dikshit is there, I have to go! :P

[Vikrantsingh]

For me Ranbir is Ok, Deepika and Madhuri are just fit for nothing.. I don't like movie for songs.read moreFor me Ranbir is Ok, Deepika and Madhuri are just fit for nothing.. I don't like movie for songs.
Its just movie which attracts me like "A Wednesday". I simply love the concept and love the flow...
Do watch sensible movies and non of the song from this movie is 10% valued or sensible though
so i would rate it 2/5
Just if the story is good bus.

" Maine tere mooh pe mara mukka " and "Balam pichkari" Just hopeless songs of this year.

Cheers!
Singh ;)

[Shivam Murari]

Battameez Dil and Balam pichkari may be meaningless but they are fun party songs depicting youth. We need catchy songs too after all :P
Besides, I liked Deepika's fine acting skills in cocktail, she did it nicely. And she is doing a female dominated movie Ram Leela too, which will finally test her acting skill. And yes, I watch sensible movies too. Barfi was one example. 3 Idiots, Kahaani etc. A Wednesday was good either. Besides, Ayan Mukherjee's promos are full of youth but his story is sensible. I still remember how much I hated Wake Up Sid because of its silly promos, but when I saw the movie, it was like "Okay! Nice!" So perhaps same would be the case here either. otherwise of course, if the story is , a girl and a boy fall in love but don't get married because boy doesn't blv in marriage or some other silly reason but then finally he realizes how much he loves her and then marries her are some of the boring Indian stuffs I hate. :P

[smilempsn]

Listen to Songs 'Illahi' (Mohit Chauhan ) and 'Kabira' (Arijit and Toshi) they are nice songs... Though not promoted much.. But I like them ..

[smilempsn]

2 days.. n just 4 review comments... NOT FARE..!! ;)

[Vikrantsingh]

Lol i was way busy so itne he comments aaye :P
Yesh!! now even in my client emails i write this word "YESH"
:P I saw.. Fast & Furious 6 Wow.. whaaaaaat and amazing movie
End was Jaw breaking ... must watch ;) If you have seen all 5 parts then this part is worth watching
Waiting for Fast & Furious 7 (Releasing on - 2014)

[smilempsn]

n change the habit of writing :-/
We should not adapt bad habits :P

hmm.. friends saw that movie, and said its good to be watched.. sahi hai .. means had a nice weekend aa :P

[Vikrantsingh]

I'm crazy fan of Vin Diesel/Paul Walker/Dwayne Johnson(Rock)/Sung Kang & Tyrese Gibson They are superstar ;) m/

[smilempsn]

I also like Vin Diesel & Paul Walker :D
More of Vin Diesel actually :D

[Vikrantsingh]

Yesh Paul Walker is Smart ;)

[smilempsn]

'YES' :)

[Vikrantsingh]

:O okay...

[smilempsn]

B-)

[Vikrantsingh]

:P

[John A Raju]

good sentiment, good feel but the grammar issues interrupted the flow a bit, for e.g it shoukd havr been like i miss 'you', went back 'into' my dream and like this 'lonely' stupid night. the feel was good though

[Vikrantsingh]

I made those error purposely. I know
"You might miss me
Like I miss me."

Like i miss me - i'm trying to convey here. Do u miss me like i'm missing myself inside me.

;) that was intentionally :D

- Cheers,
Vikrantsingh Parmar

[Shivam Murari]

To hell with the grammar issues, I love the idea and the write! Its so adorable! The meter is off and the rhyme is repetitive, so bro, I would just advice you to improve on these three areas (grammar, meter, rhyme) because I can see the seed of writer germinating within you :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Shivam, sometimes you make mistakes purposely like I did in few of my stanzas.. I hope you loved it :)

Its all distances between my wife and my daughter.. I'm felt :)

- Cheers *Hugs*
Singh :)

[Shivam Murari]

Oh those purposeful mistakes are understandable, of course! :) I was talking about the rhyming scheme and meter, which can be erratic on purpose only in rarest of rarest cases (like my poem A Tide or A Pool) in which they represent the set of human mood too :P

((HUGS))

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wonderful endearing love poem.. I won't speak of the grammar issues, as others already have, but this is a beautiful poem. The colors distracted me though. I guess I am just old school and prefer the black ink. Well done.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks sweets :) for your review :)

Loved them as always ;)
Vikrantsingh