House in the shadows...

Mind Tricks

  

A house in the shadows

On a road going nowhere

Rooms with no light

Skeletons in every closet

 

 

A chill in the air

Walls made of mirrors

Unforgettable Mistakes

Doors all sealed tight

No way out

 

 

Ghost's standing guard

Chasing away anything good

A stolen life

A prisoner inside

 

 

Words of hope

Cruelly twisted in doubt

Distorted and cast into fragments

 Reflecting off a ray of light,

In a haze of smoke and mirrors

 

 

 

Ghost's from the past

paralyze her with slideshows

of terror filled memories

Stuck on play

 

Unable to forget

Held in a grip

Undefeatable Ghosts

Who won't let go

 

 

Another chance passes by

Wasting away

In a house in the shadows

On a road going nowhere

In a room with no light

 

 

Day after Day

Year after year

She wonders,

If the light will ever get in

 

As she waits alone

 in the darkness,

In a house in the shadows

On a road going nowhere

With all hope

Distorted in the shadows

Of smoke and mirrors.

 

Reviews

[TAYLOR]

ONE DOOR CLOSES.......ANOTHER DOOR OPENS...WALK THRU...THE LIGHTS ARE ON...AND A WARM HEART GREETS YOU THERE...LEAVE ALL WHAT IS PAST...SHOWER IN NEW LIFE....THIS WAS A WONDERFUL WRITE AND COULD BE A SHORT STORY..MAYBE LEFT UNTOLD..WATCH THE PAST THRU YOUR REAR VIEW MIRROR..KEEP YOUR EYES ON THE ROAD AHEAD

[Rain]

Some pieces you just feel from the first line. This was one of those. It left me with this haunting, melancholy feel. I don't even want to delve into why. The feeling it left is like hearing a song that captures you, even when you're not sure of all the words. I LOVED this. Rain..

[T. L. O'Neal]

This was a good poem and it made me think of it as the house as a metphor for her memories and past. Great imagery and write. T

[Tania Leigh]

Excellent poem about the past having one in its clutches....

I love this:
"Ghost's from the past
Paralyze her with slideshows
of terror filled memories
Stuck on play"

Classic.....great write!

[Kelley Pascoe]

This was really a good poem Victoria Lee! I'm glad I came to read it.
Kind of reminds me of my poem "Home Sweet Home" If you get a chance come read it on here(smile)
Anyway I reall liked the flow of this poem and I could not help to think
Maybe it just might have a little bit of you in it?
Well great write!!! Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Imperfection]

Very sad but so beautifully expressed.

I liked it very much.

[Amor-de-angel]

Sounds like a desperate move to leave the past and move on,
Love is trying to find a way
Into the house that sits in the shadows
And free her

Lovlely expressed write

[Forest Green]

My, oh, my, how the terrors of the past play upon the present...very well illustrated; the hollowness and emptiness of a home deserted.

Very nice portrait of a sad reality.

Good work.

FG

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Often our heart can be that 'house of darkness'. The psychological encapsulation of an individual's ability to move forward from that point of trauma in their life, has been poignantly, metaphorically and sympathetically portrayed within the text. As I read, the intensity of a 'plea for help' resounded in my soul.

The reassurance of rescue lays in the faith of knowing that in all things, there is an obverse. Dark/light, sad/happy, evil/good.

Excellent, thought provoking write!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Lydia Shutter]

There is a feeling of being lost in a labyrinth of life in this well written poem...a feeling of being unsure of what lies just outside the maze and a feeling of perhaps wanting to stay within its boundaries. Skeletons scream to be let loose just when serenity is within our grasp...the only thing to do is to ignore their screams and smile. They have not power over you. Victoria, this is exceptionally well written. Lydia

[Brette Medb]

I really liked this! There was so much going on and I loved how the mind and all the doubts became a house that kept her prisoner from herself. There was a lot of emotion behind this... great write.


Brette