Fade away..

 

I cannot

see or hear you

Yet  I know you are there

Every night, every day

Judging me

Watching

every move I make

Analyzing

every word I write

Twisting everything I say

into something about you

Narcissistic

 Pessimistic

 Maybe even

psychotic

You are

A fading piece of the past

that I prefer not to remember

I only have the scars from your attacks

to remind me you ever were

 The knife to the back

 should cause you the most shame

But it was your insane, angry words

that caused me the most pain

Just like the bruises left on my soul

You're just a memory

fading away

A sad scene

Just a bad dream

Fading away

Fade 

away

 

 

 

 

 

          

 

 

Reviews

[Richard McLin]

I love the color and structure of this piece, it's simply beautiful. You have done a wonderful job on not only writting a good piece, but making something that is nice to look at as well. It is always a joy to read your work, this is no exception.

Richard

[Carole]

I hate being under the microscope of anyone's heavy hand. For that reason, I can say I relate 100% with this write...I guess knowing who you are and understanding our imperfections is enough for me. I know where to go when I mess up and once I make it right, I cast it to the wind, never to be remembered. I don't live in condemnation or shame or guilt. It is a thing of the past. So happy to have found that secret. It sure makes living much more enjoyable and peaceful.

You have hammered out another flawless piece, Victoria. Great job! Carole

[Victoria Lee~]

Thank you for reviewing this little ramble of mine!

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is a favorite! I can relate to the feeling that you describe. I think sometimes words can hurt more than physical abuse. Im trying very hard to live in today, because if I keep on looking in the rearview mirror of life I will wreck. This is something I really needed to read today is was a very cathartic piece! ~ Jude xo

[Daryl]

I like this. Not only are the words well chosen, but the presentation, the visual layout, really drives home the feelings behind them.

I especially love
the fading away
at the
end

Another good one, Victoria.

[Beth]

Oh, those people who leave such as effect on us, even from years in the past. Excellent job describing the hurt, the anger, and the trying to forget.

[Jenny Davis]

Oh, this is a perfect read for me right now...I hope my devil fades away completely soon too!
This was fantastic, Victoria :)

[Ladysue]

Victoria, I love this very much. It was expertly wriiten and I could relate to this so much. These lines linger in my mind and they say so much.
But it was your insane, angry words
that caused me the most pain
Just like the bruises left on my soul

A well crafted piece!

[TAYLOR]

THIS PIECE IS WRITTEN SO WELL...IT HAS A LET THE BATH WATER OUT OF THE BATHTUB FEEL......CLEANSING THE SOUL.....................TAYLOR

[Dezaraye]

This is a strong and powerful piece. I like how you ended the piece with the words fade away together and then by themselves on separate lines. Nice job.

[Brette Medb]

Nice... I liked the flow... great work.


Brette