The Duel

What happens when blinded we get blinded by rage. I might make it into a short story sometime.

Gun in hand.

 

So here we are, you and me

Facing off in the dusty street.

I've got wet tears in my eyes,

Dark blood on my knees.

Burning hate in my heart.

Awful fear in my feet.

 

Gun in hand.

 

So here we are, you and me

Facing off in the dusty street.

You think it's all a game,

And you always fail to see

The reason of what seems

Some sort of twisted dream.

 

Gun in hand.

 

So here we are, you and me,

Lying in the dusty street.

Still trying to make the other see

What we were trying to be.

But not stopping to think

That these guns would really make us bleed. 

 

Gun in hand.

 

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

It's unique and very interesting. I really like how you emphasize the duel with the imagery that you present through your words. I think you did a good job here. I don't see any errors or mistakes, so I don't have any suggestions for improvement. I think it's good as it is.

[Hayley]

I like it. The "Gun in Hand" getting gradually smaller is very effective visually and in the writing as well.

[ShaneBerry]

wow, the red lettering hooks you in immediately, a very unique write. to me it was like the same two, standing off at different periods in time, realizing that it is getting them no were, but continuing to do so anyways.