A Broken Girl

A song I made for every broken girl out there... You're not alone, so hold fast hope. We might be broken but we are beautiful.

She wants to fly far away

but with broken dreams

and broken wings

she ain't got a chance

or so it seems.

 

Broken girl

Just a real sad girl

She's had a hard time

But knows she gotta survive

 

She wants freedom so bad

But with these memories

Of real bad things

she never knows

what she's supposed to be

 

Broken girl

Such a real sad girl

She's had a hard time

But she's gonna survive

 

That broken girl

Someone should give her the world

She deserves it so much

And a loving gentle touch.

 

Broken girl

It'll be okay girl

You'll have the world

Beautiful girl

 

Broken girl

It's all okay girl

I'll give you the world

My beautiful girl

Author's Note

The song actually has a bit of a country twang to it... But, tell me what you think. Honest opinion.

Reviews

[Marianne]

Oh, it's easy on the eye, soft on the tongue, breaking my heart, moving my mind, wishing this girl all the love and joy this world can offer. Battered but not broken...this is the hope every person should possess to keep on keeping on.

The flow is smooth, a melancholic song with sentiments of depth in strength and beauty of soul.

In the sixth stanza, 3rd. line how about " the world is your's " ??

[Arabdha]

the poem speaks of so much sadness..i know everyone of us can relate to a time when we've all felt like this..a beautiful tribute..almost a prayer..well done !

[Charity]

It does sound like a song. I love the heartfelt words and theme to this poem! it makes you feel love and sadness for the little, beautiful girl. nice job!

[Rebel Angel]

Oh its lovely. It so simple yet so sweet and so heart breaking. So many people feel broken and then "I'll give you the world, My beautiful girl." its so sweet and lovely. I can imgine it being such a lovely song, so simply sweet and soft. Great write.

[Cypress Cain]

This is beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. What a depiction of love? The redemption of the human spirit by this kinsman-redeemer of sorts is breathtaking. The beautiful broken girl that is the subject of this, must truly be blessed, as the man loving her must be as well. Definitely breathtaking.

[TheFemininePad]

This poem actually brought me to tears. I could feel the sadness of the girl, and how the poet longed to make her happy. This poem is sad in a lot of ways to me. It's also an amazing poem that I don't see where you could improve it. The emotional power of this poem is great.