Watching, as I lay Dying

a dark, deep implement to a point of veiw

Watching, as I lay Dying

Let’s begin to a familiar line

Do you see what I see?

Pain in the truth

What seen once was done

Now, Obliterate me

Shatter all which held

Find my glue

Meltaway all

Connected

 During this victim’s haze

I see the sins, hate, ignorance

Your selfish insides

My pure heart wrought!

SCREAMING through pain

I can’t prove my disdain

You know I can’t hold my

Persian Mascaraed

Dressage of gold, fools, no truth, your innocence

Nowhere exists!

My freezing spine, slowly

Warmth will leave!

Soon this being will break

As the baker’s dozen…

Shell sufficed

Now, you’ll be shown

As a Weathered Tome

 Knows no drought

You have,

NO Idea!, my storm!

Sorrow, pain, pity nor patience await

Blood now concentrated in Hatred, thick

I kept this side away, hidden

If I’d’ve told

No ears are open, my friend, ‘my’ victim

I begged you to end your ways

Turn around! Care! Open your eyes!

No mental state occurred

Everything told to be Left alone or Avoided

Running to it, eager, unexpecting, always rediscovering

What never was to be known

No closing in song, nor savior

You’ve been told

For all this suffering

From you I gain none of

Remorse

Excuse

Pity

Accusation

Review

Apprehension

Reflection

Answering

Torment

Inquisition

Oratory

Negativity

You honor this?!

You, my friend, ‘my’ victim

Watching as I lay Dying

Collect these tears

Stain upon this blood

Stand in my shattered soul

Savior, they know not what they do…

Open their eyes!

By quarantine_deathangel all copyright reserved

Author's Note

This is a little long, the story going on here is the soul being exposed to the truth of the world in my own point of veiw through what I've studied on the psyche and explains a point of veiw, then what they go through ends in them turning every last good part that's turned to despair into hatred for revenge bringing the good pure side of the soul's death since darkness, war and sin won't end and bring even the soul to complete hatred, finishing into it the enemy, referring to the lines collect these tears, stain upon this blood, stand in my shattered soul, and fyi when I go through the single word lines, downwards they make a little sense although, taking the first letter from top word then down 12 lines repeating you'll spell a word, then the good is disgusted by the darkness hence you honor this!? then they are fully enveloped into the enemy completing the poem is when the sacrifice is made, and with understanding eyes realize their mistake with no redo.

Reviews

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I really quite love this I could feel pain and anger, I don't think it was all too long. A beautiful write. Also I don't get what people are saying about fonts, from what I saw it was basically one font the whole way through wasn't it? Regardless it was an amazing poem and I loved it.

[minisla]

Really enjoyed this read. I may be wrong by saying this but do you feel your poetry needs to be written in different fonts as it can be a slow process for my mind to process the information or do you feel it adds meaning by writing in this style?

[quarintine_deathangel]

The meaning in my writing jumps subject to subject and may have more than one perspective or main character in some instances. I think have specific fonts helps direct my writing and makes it much easier to understand. If you want I can send you a uniformed font version.

[minisla]

Ah no its your work and i don't mean to be disrespectful. I enjoyed reading it.

[minisla]

Just take a little getting used to as I have not come across this style before. Keep up the good work. I on the other hand need a bit more practice lol

[quarintine_deathangel]

You're perfectly fine :) I know there are readers on here who have a hard time reading 50+ different fonts in one poem, it's completely understandable ^.< I can send a single font version to you if you want. Just ask it's no biggie for me! ^.^

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

I felt the passion in this beautiful piece, I love it.

[Pikachu]

Wow, this is beautiful.

You write wonderfully! (:

[Alex Vidmar]

Great! Love it! However! I had a little bit of difficulty with reading some of the fonts. Other than that, it was absolutely amazing! I honestly want to hear the song if you ever write it! :) Well done!

[Reaper]

I love all the fonts but it kind of distracts from the poem in a whole

[EMF]

I wouldn't have called it long. Just good. That which I could read. Not a complaint, but cataracts which make some font's impossible for me to see. But from what I have seen it was exceptional work. And if it was long for some of the people on here... they should damn well learn to read longer work. Brevity does not necessarily mean quality. Just that it's short.