Seven Lovely Sins

They aren't so bad after all....you just need to view them in a different way ;)

Lust,
For you and me, it sets us free,
No boundaries, just luxuries,
Gluttony,
Another taste? Oh please, I wait,
For lips of sweet and body heat,
Greed,
You’re all mine, and don’t you lie,
Don’t act so shrewd, you crave me too,
Sloth,
Relaxed, unbent our times are spent,
Kissing deep, no time for sleep,  
Anger,
Like furious beasts we’re bothered least,
By others’ word, they’re quite absurd,
Pride,
I feel quite proud of you, and how,
We pride our self as conjoined stealth,
Envy,
And knowingly I am envied,
By other sharks who want your heart

Reviews

[Terrence Chang]

What you have written Verto is an art. I really like it. The seven deadly sins. Thus far we he have come just to visit he'll.

[MoriartyMesa]

One or two tune ups, but nice job all the same.

[GTVile]

Mispelled "lovely" but beyond that its freaking amazing. Best thing I've read all morning.

[Vanesa Markovic]

Very creative!

The only thing I'd note is the repetition...angry/anger.

Good work!

[boyinblue]

really cool and well laid out.

[Riss]

:D Beautifully written love it