aftermath.

a different kind of happily ever after...

her spirit lives as petals on the air,
immersed in honey of an iris blue;
assailed by pixels of her spirit fair
his mem’ries sag into a flummoxed hue.
such tiny things with stratagem imbue,
surprise attack with a mosquito's power.
and yet mosquitos beg him, dance me, do
unlike her loveliness, the torpored flower
that shishas on the wing, where answers cower
she wends her way to cloud and touches dream
while navigating a galactic shower;
her wisdom knows few things are what they seem.
alack, the afterlife's relentless path
when love takes refuge in its aftermath.

Author's Note

Be warned... I’m in a rhyming mood, and a sonnet-writing mood. :):)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I respect you for tackling a sonnet & weaving in all the requirements as well as presenting an interestingly unusual message. I had to read twice trying to capture everything you're saying, but I'm not very good at nuanced poetry like this. Let it suffice to say I very much love the originality of using "mosquito" as a quirky element as well as an intriguing symbol for something bothersome. I also love that you do not use the elevated Shakespearean style language yet your construction is equally complex with unexpected word choices (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Verse]

Hey there, Margie! I am always glad to see you. :):)

You are very kind in your responses, because even when the style of poetry is something a bit more abstract than you like, you read through carefully and give a considered response. :):)

I should warn you, I'm a big fan of elevated language, and will probably use some in sonnets here and there going forward. Sometimes I provide a plain-language adaptation in the notes, but very often I just let people sift through, and enjoy the musicality of it all.

All to say thank you for noticing the little mosquitos here! I don't think anyone has ever commented on them before.

V

[Neville]

and ya just can't beat a flummoxed hue can ya... :)

[Verse]

hahaha! Is there any other kind of hue that matters?

[Neville]

Dunno … am gonna go check out with Liz Hurley :)

[Verse]

Hahahahaha!!!

[Neville]

Have a great day Verse

N

[Neville]

I admire anyone who tackles this beast.. I have never dared because I know it would better me... You have certainly achieved something special here in my opinion.. and whilst not an expert on the sonnet by a long stretch.. I do know what I like.. respect.. lots of it..

Neville

[Verse]

Well, thanks a lot, Nev!!! Now I've got Aretha singing in my head. RESPECT... :):)

Thanks, but you know? It's something you learn, sonnet writing. A skill like any other, like learning how to boost an old, half-dead battery on someone's car, for instance. No big deal, once you know how.

Thanks, Nev! You're a peach, so much more appreciated in the cold of winter.

V

[Neville]

Hey.. how is that even possible.. not just the battery thing but mistakin a prune for a peach :)

[Verse]

Hehehe! Nev, you sure know how to make a girl laugh!!! 😂😂

V

[Neville]

..........😎

[mattavelli]

Hello, Verse, I read it twice and couldn't wrap my head around it. She died?

[Verse]

Hahaha! No, she broke up with him, and he never recovered. ;)

V

[Flowers of Eternity]

I have to admit, I had a hard time understanding your sonnet, but beautifully written, it is in-depth, creative and to be honest I have not read anything like this before. I would really like to know the meaning behind your words but only if you permit it. A very job well done!

[Verse]

Hey there, Flowers of Eternity! I’ve been away for some time now, so forgive the delay in responding.

Don’t worry too much about the actual meanings of every word. If this sonnet were a picture on a wall, you would look at it, and think of it as a matter of interpretation. Just enjoy the combination of “colours”, if they are pleasing to you. I should say, though, that this is one of my favourite styles, so you may see more of these types of poems from me. Call me a nerd!!! It’s a medical condition... just need to get them out. :):)

Thanks again for reading me so patiently, and I look forward to reading you!

V

[Flowers of Eternity]

Hello Verse, Glad to see your back again! Hope to read more of your works soon!

[Suhd]

This is superb piece of writing. I've never read anything like this before. It's that fresh and original :)

[Verse]

Ah, Suhd, you’re the coolest! Thank you!!! :):)

V

[Suhd]

Always a pleasure :) And thanks for the compliment :)

[Ghost writer]

this is cool I really like the last couple lines, it really impresses me that that flows naturally for you

[Verse]

It's one of those weird things - some people flow, I sonnet... but only with a lot of inspiration taken from far better writers than I will ever be.

[Ghost writer]

anyone can be a great writer.

[Esther]

I love the elegant style in which your words flow along the page

[Verse]

Thank you very much, Esther!!! Really great hearing from you, and your kind words mean a lot. :):)

V

[Chris Shaw]

Why Verse this is as good a sonnet as I have seen anywhere. Love it, and the rich language you have used. It flows like a stream. Beautiful. Stands and applauds the lady. Well done you.

Chris

[Verse]

oh, smiles and love to you, Chris!!! Walking on air, yet again!!! :):)

V

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wonderful sonnet.

smooth as silk...and some loves are forever and even after that...we all hope for this kind of love to immerse us---and we don't really mind if we end up flummoxed (as Bilbo Baggins would say)---

nicely done, Verse.
j.

[Verse]

Oh, thank you, Jacob, for being unafraid of rhyme, and being flummoxed in the name of enduring love. :):)

I feel as lovely as silk with your beautiful comment!

V