Imprisoned eyes

Her lashes spread out in a delicate grating,
enclose in upon her soul.
Imprison her teary eyes,
guard secrets of love.

Reviews

[William Liston]

Wow. Such few words yet such great emotion. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.

-William Liston

[Arjun Singh]

A gd write...
If i might sgst, cd u work on d length a bit?
I know u can, nd den I cn guarantee first class poetry

[Vernika]

What length are you talking about? You want me to make it longer or something?

[Arjun Singh]

Yes Vernika
Its my opinion dt a little length to d poem wd mk it btr... :)

[Vernika]

I guess that's where I lack. I just can't write long texts. Their essence is sort of lost then. It gets boring for me and that would reflect in my work if I make it longer.

[Arjun Singh]

Sure... whatever suits u, nevr cramp ur style
( Thumbs Up ) :)

[Vernika]

haha yeah! :) :)

[Stan Lee]

Nice descriptive piece. I probably would have labelled it as a prose poem rather than a story?
Thanks for sharing. :)

[Vernika]

Thanks for the suggestion. And thanks for reviewing! :)

[Stan Lee]

Welcome anytime friend :)