Silhouette

 

You are of the nights skies…

Unable to touch reality.

 

Like the fog, you hover and fade.

Leaving a silhouette, I wish to behold...

Of dust you are made.

 

Eyes like collapsing stars

You are my mysterious lover

Beyond my grasp in the dark…

 

Wanting to linger in the night

While your presence invades my light

Overwhelming urges to cry-

fill my insides…

 

Knowing you will go away…

at the blink of an eye.

 

You are of the night skies…

Your hearts made of mist

And your skin is the wind.

 

I breathe to take you in,

And drown you in my sins.

 

My mysterious lover,

Takes my breath away,

Each time he hovers and fades…

 

Leaving my life

Dark like an eclipse…

Remaining only as a silhouette.

 

 

 

J.Cruz@2010

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

Lovely baroque poem, very intricate and elaborate descriptions and similes. Very well constructed. This poem is big, and powerful, very strong and bold in the descriptives, but yet also ghostly and ethereal... the poem leaves the question open of who, or what, the lover is... a real lover, a ghost, a dream, a vision, a metaphor? Very clever, it takes discipline not to lose the ability to apply the content in different ways. Nice poem :)

[Siren]

This is beautiful :) You paint the picture of a lover, just beyond grasp, barely forbidden, and still out of reach. Wonderful job!

[Plagued Monumentally]

I really loved the mysterious, eerie feeling about this poem after. You did a good job about creating a scene that I could imagine in my head.

"You are of the night skies…
Your hearts made of mist
And your skin is the wind."

That was my favorite line of the whole poem. So captivating and romantic that it made me smile. Good job!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i love the ethereal quality of this. the allusions to fog, mist, silhouettes, darkness all add to the description of someone or something not quite of substance, yet still there. well done.

[Dream Weaver]

You have a way with words as in this write that
takes my breath away...Mysterious, eloquent ,
mesmerizing!

[Thea]

Excellent choice of words! I love it! Very romantic! ♥

[Darkest Rose]

Wow I love this! Wording is awesome and it's such a romantic poem!! Amazing write :)

[TheElfPrincess]

Stunning and breath taking, a romantic poem. I loved this very much, well done.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

You are my mysterious lover with eyes like collapsing stars. Overwhelming urges to cry fill my insides. I breathe to take you in.......drown you in my sins. You leave my life dark as an eclipse......wildly romantic, beautifully written!