Silhouette

 

You are of the nights skies…

Unable to touch reality.

 

Like the fog, you hover and fade.

Leaving a silhouette, I wish to behold...

Of dust you are made.

 

Eyes like collapsing stars

You are my mysterious lover

Beyond my grasp in the dark…

 

Wanting to linger in the night

While your presence invades my light

Overwhelming urges to cry-

fill my insides…

 

Knowing you will go away…

at the blink of an eye.

 

You are of the night skies…

Your hearts made of mist

And your skin is the wind.

 

I breathe to take you in,

And drown you in my sins.

 

My mysterious lover,

Takes my breath away,

Each time he hovers and fades…

 

Leaving my life

Dark like an eclipse…

Remaining only as a silhouette.

 

 

 

J.Cruz@2010

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

Lovely baroque poem, very intricate and elaborate descriptions and similes. Very well constructed. This poem is big, and powerful, very strong and bold in the descriptives, but yet also ghostly and ethereal... the poem leaves the question open of who, or what, the lover is... a real lover, a ghost, a dream, a vision, a metaphor? Very clever, it takes discipline not to lose the ability to apply the content in different ways. Nice poem :)

[Ruth]

This holds so much mysticism feel to it...beautifully written and delivered! So invitingly warm and intriguing! Beautiful poem love! xx

[Daytonight]

Love the mysterious quality to this beautiful poem. Well done! Keep on penning.

[Allen Smuckler]

Unbelievably J. I've been searching for the past hour, on the internet for a silhouette of two people making love for my poem "Take Me In"...all I can see, all i can say....is please read it. It's on p. 4 or 5 of my writngs...thanks
You'll understand why this poem is so meaningful to me...
Beautifully written
allen

[Inyourshadow]

Deep, thought provoking words, what are we and what will we be when once more the light is shone upon us from anothers eyes ?

I breathe to take you in,
And drowned you in my sins.

I adore these lines and their almost honest quality as do we not so often unintentionally corrupt with our own words or touch, even flowers wilt when tended to oft'.

Love the poem, keep em' coming

[biggerthenu]

wonderful write he's out there you created a great picture nice write

[KAREN]

Beautiful! Love the emotion and the imagery

[Alicia Hirshey]

This was beautiful. The imagery was amazing and your words flowed flawlessly.

[Art Sun]

a nicely written pom...

[MS. BABy]

A sexy piece the tone was infectious...i enjoyed....

[EMF]

A beuatiful, sensuous poem. A wonderful sumation of love and lovers. The flow and structure are perfection