The sound of the end

Yes,we thought we'll die together,

and we thought we'll fly forever
we stole a small piece of sky.
We were silly,I won't deny.

I've already faced it:
we had to grow apart,
I know I had to commit,
but how to explain that to heart?

It still spreads it's little wings,
ready to fly away 
with the sound of your voice,
That's not it's fault,I have to say,
'cause the end wasn't it's choice.

But the life goes on,
driving fast like a bus,
and I think I'll never know;
Did we choose the end,
Or the end has chosen us?

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

wow, I really like this and I can totally relate. We often question ourselves in relationships if something's our fault or who's fault it is if not yours. We never do figure it out. Instead as writers, we find a way to comfort our heart, write poems until our hands bleed, then move onto someone much better than the jerk that caused your life chaos. Writing, I have to admit, helps solves a lot of things. My current boyfriend read a poem of mine that I wrote for him through text and we clicked instantly. That's when he asked me out. I gave him the extra support and strength to push forward to go through his huge decision. When we do find the right person, we don't have to worry whether or not it's the end or if we choose the end. Everything happens for a reason, whether it's good or bad. Keep the sidenote in your mind at all costs! Amazing write, with such an excellent rhyming scheme happening! :)

I did notice a few misspellings in your poem if you don't mind me pointing them out to you?

Okay, in the first couple of lines in the first stanza- since "thought" is in past tense so should the words following. Instead it should look like this:

*Yes, we thought we'd die together,
(and looks better captialized) And we thought we'd fly forever
We stole a small piece of sky(a period maybe shouldn't be there since the next line rhymes with it.)
We were silly, I won't deny.

[Velida]

The first version actually really was with would,not will (..in the first stanza) but I have no idea why I changed it. and yes,if there are other mistakes,like that one,let me know,so I can fix it up. Because I learned English at school,I'm Bosnian.
good luck with your boyfriend,if he's really the one. I'm glad you found the right person for yourself :D
oh,and thank you for the compliments about my writing :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh haha just making sure it was okay to point out your mistakes. You're very welcome too. Thank you so much. He's amazing and glad to have him too. You're welcome again:)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You drive this verse... with the reader and tell the story... but leave us to question the end thought... for ourselves to acquire an answer...

[Velida]

Yes, because I know it's not just my story, there are many broken hearts out there feeling just like me, and that question is the one that usually torchers us all...

[Broken Soul]

It really hurts when you know the end is near, whether it be with relationships or not. nice read

[Velida]

Yes, you're right, but you know what they say; ''Every ending means a new beginning'' :D

[Leigh]

This is very moving and poses a big question, I like the realism of it and the detachment from life and the outside world, beautiful

[Velida]

Thank you :)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

This was exceptional and I found it lovable in an existentialist way, and it felt like reading lyrics, the first 2 paragraphs had me mesmerized, I hope you submit it to my contest!

[Velida]

Thank you. :)
I will :D

[Circe]

these are words of a shining wisdom... very impressive for a young writer... and I could feel this is written from experience and knowing.. love the taste of something real, thank you for sharing this. every stanza was captivating and kept me wanting to know more... your questions are well voiced even if the answers seem just that immense.

[Velida]

Thank you.
and yes, it is experience. a pretty tough one. it took me almost a year to get over it. so this poem actuallly represents me leaving it all behind and moving on without the answers I wanted to know.

[Circe]

that is no easy thing to get over, I admire your strength and the conviction of your words.

[akihsna]

Really pretty..as they say, beauty lies in simplicity ^^

[Velida]

Thanks a lot :D

[Seamstress]

Wonderfully written.

[Velida]

Thank you :))

[amarlaksh]

liked the last line. Good keep writimg

[Velida]

Thank You. :D

[Sami Khalil]

A sweet poem . I enjoyed the read...

[Velida]

Thanks :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...