Poetry for the Young Broken Heart

A story within a poem...a young girl wants to show her feelings for a guy she is in love with, so she sets out to write him a myriad of poems...but as with many stories of love at this age it is unreturned and instead she finds criticism and her feelings

Like any young girl, I wanted him to be impressed

with my poetry, after all I was writing for him, my one and only

I thought I could write anything

So he asked..."anything???

can you write a poem about fire?"

Oh yes of course...

It is only a simple matter....

for words that rhyme with fire, such as

desire

can be fitting in a poem about flames

and heat

so I wrote:

Her desire was filled with heat and fire

"Not another word!" he scoffed.

"You can rhyme...that's good, but you're not writing

what you feel...how about this..instead write me a poem about love..."

Love?

Love.

I love you

I thought.

I wrote:

My love is tender, and unrequited

You do not know its depths

As fathomless as the ocean

my love for you....

"Oh come now!" he snorted, 'as fathomless as the ocean'? Couldn't you try to be more original?

How about you try to write something with more 'depth'...how about you write a poem about death?"

Well by now as you can imagine my heart felt like dying...

My heart was so full of love for you

but the feeling was unreturned

I would have gone to the moon for you

instead, my heart you had burned...

And now it is charred and blackened by flames

of the hate you openly dealt

How could my heart have ever been so full

for love you never really felt.

So now my heart dies...

Is that deep enough?

Each pang, another "little death"

How will it ever love again?

For this was my love's last breath.

Over time, oceans become shallow

pools of mud...once so abundant with life

As does my heart become shallow for you...

when it was once so full of an emotion

that I can no longer place anywhere

but in memory

 "and with anything

but strife",

I added aloud.

I slowly turned and walked away.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[lunatic.]

Powerful words in the poem, amazing description of an unrequited love

I love how he 'snorts' and 'scoffs' at her initial poem about fire, and her ability to weave in her feelings to the poem.

'is that deep enough?' that really sealed the deal for me. brilliant!

[Just Plain Me]

This is an amazing poem.
I love how it has poems, inside of the whole.
Great Write :D