Her intricate nature

A ghazal.

Her nature has been intricate ever since,
she has just been an intimate ever since.

I eyed her beautiful and guileless visage,
she has simply seemed great ever since.

We quarreled the first day we went out,
we have never been on a date ever since.

She has never been there in my destiny,
I have disgraced my sad fate ever since.

I thought our hearts would meet 'Vatsal',
but we have been separate ever since.

Author's Note

Criticism is always welcome.
It is a trend to include your name in the last couplet while writing a ghazal and such a couplet is known as maqta.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I have no knowledge of this poetic form & I'm not a big fan of repetitious poems. That being said, I really do like most of your poem (the parts I can understand). The repetitious parts sound like a person hammering himself for not doing something differently upon that first meeting, such that he is now unable to move forward with this beloved as he would've wished to do.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for that review, ma'am. I will improve.

[barleygirl]

We're all improving (((HUGS)))

[Pryde Foltz]

There are definitely some quarrels I would like to take back. I felt this one, Vatsal:)

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thank you for your review.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Vatsal!
Ah, such are the little challenges on a new date with one we aspire to impress, we must ever be on the alert to anything that might go awry, and seems (unfortunately) yours did.
A cute and interesting tale, My Imaginative Friend, of a situation too many of us may have found ourselves in, but it is true life, eh?
I'm guessing the moral is: If you want to have many dates with an alluring lady, ovoid arguments with her at every opportunity … LOL!
I genuinely enjoy the Ghazal form, Vatsal, and have written a few over the years, and in considering its rules it seems I recall the first verse should be a Quatrain of two couplets, with each line throughout, of the same syllable length.
Then, I am no expert on this form, but I've absolutely enjoyed your "sad, but true" version of it.

Thank you immensely for entertaining us with your always interseting imagination … many smiles to you! ⁓ Richard

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thank you very much, sir, for your insightful review. You seem to get the precise message which I wished to convey. And, as you have mentioned, syllable count and refrain matter a lot in a conventional ghazal- but syllable count continues to trouble me, tough I think I am improving.
Your review provided me motivation and I am glad that you found my work pleasing. Thank you very much.