For Each Other

A Shakespearean sonnet with the rhyme scheme- abab cdcd efef gg

When she touches my cheek with her lips,

my heart's pace receives an accruement,

and my stomach does many back-flips,

I think- it is for me, she has been sent.

Her hair are as black as the night sky,

her hair wave as if the waves of the sea,

her eyes glisten like the bright sky,

her eyes are always looking at me.

She says that she loves me profoundly,

and I go scarlet at that precise moment,

I return that I too love her profoundly,

and she goes red at that precise moment.

For each other, we live each moment,

and for each other, we have been sent.

Author's Note

Please review and point out the cons.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

A well-constructed love sonnet, describing a few specific feelings that stand out in this experience between two lovers. Even tho every word is meaningful & flowing gracefully, I feel you've missed the opportunity to make every word count . . . due to repetition in 2nd & 3rd stanzas . . . instead of introducing more details to paint these shy revelations, or stating reciprocal feelings in a new or contrasting way.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks, Barleygirl, for your review.

[Peter Rogerson]

I can't think of any cons. I enjoyed your poem. Lovely.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Peter, thank you very much for your kind review. I am glad that I am improving.