When You Left

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I am more lost than you know.

 I cant even find the shore.

Left to drift on the deep blue sea.

Dying from the thirst of love.

 Looking to the sky for rain, surrounded by water I can not drink.

My reflection the only eyes on me.

Screaming but no one to hear.

Forced to look away I can no longer be.

Sinking in the dark, crying in the water.

Love’s nomad, with no place to call home.

Reviews

[Lindsay]

wow this poem is amazing, its so honest. i love how it shows the deep emotions that your feeling and how i can get a vivid picture of what you are trying to get your readers to connect with. very nice work :)

[misha]

This was a really good poem.

[Allan Eddings]

The water is cold and formless and it is all around us, you use this so well. This piece is so cold, it claws at the sides of our hearts begging for something, something we cannot give. Believe me when I say I absolutely love this piece, easily one of the best I have seen on this website, and amongst some of the best I have read.

Fear not the cliche, the reason they are so often retold is because they are always and perpetually and universally true.

Thank you sincerely,
A.E.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good poem. I love it so much. Good job on this poem. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Ashley ✎]

Good description, structure :) It really describes what someone must be feeling when someone leaves. Good job ;)

[AchingAlexandra]

This kinda feels like an inner soul kind of piece. It's really nice, and seems to be open. (:

[Karina Longo]

This is very graphical, full of colours, images and sparkling emotions. Really like it.

[qaralynn]

great write!!

[T.W. Early]

That is very powerful. love the emotion. great job.

[Alicia™]

This is so beautifully written… The last line especially, is wonderful. Using being lost at sea is really a clever metaphor for this feeling, and the 5th line shows it well. Great job.