Strings

Love is the connection of strings sparking electricity in the hearts.

For how long can fate keep them intertwined?

Bound to unwind, fraying at the edges over time.

 

For so deep and dark is life’s messages, meanings, and morals, that at times we get lost. One’s love can be measured at to what cost they will pay to get us back, otherwise left to wander in this dim lit black.

Feeling for strings we reach out seeking another’s embrace, yet we are left alone in this place. As we grab stone. Its rocky cold grit leaves you chilled.

 

Saddened by the emptiness left that was once love filled, left only to build, you pick up the blocks but for some reason they will not click.

Every space found for them wrong, every pattern incorrect.

Thinking you will never recreate what was once had you sit cold, crying, and alone.

Reviews

[morningstar]

this is really good. I love how you compared love to stings in a persons heart. Favorite lines were the first 2 lines
' Love is a connection of strings sparking electricity in the hearts.
For how long can fate keep them intertwined?' This is good stuff you got here

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

This is really good, love it. However I think that your structure here is a bit weak, it might be worth having a look back over this and seeing if you can shift anything around, it just might make it flow a bit better y'know? Either way great write. =)

[T.W. Early]

Another powerfully emotional poem. keep up the great poetry.

[theunionisloud]

Awesome. I love the simple form here... you come out and tell us your metaphor for love without beating around the bush. It works here because your description is complex... you want us to focus on the meaning of what you're saying, rather than trying to figure out the mere subject. Great work, great work.

[Buni]

this is really good and not at all cliche. its different and very well written. i look forward to reading more of your works :)

[Arabdha]

a fresh new approach to love..strings..love the comparision..keep going !!

[Beth Wilcox]

I loved this! Keep it up!

[Salem Fitzgerald]

I love the first line of this poem. This is really good. And definitely not cliche (: bravo!