Day 1

Day 1 Entry 1:
The journey before me is filled with eagerly awaited surprises. I do have interesting sights I wish to quench my curiosity with, but what may come, may come. Blindly following a plan is incomprehensible to me. True you must have a destination to start a journey, but like a leaf blowing back and forth in autumn, it does not fall to the ground, but sways and glides, greeting the birds, feeling the air. It does a dance to the merry tune of the wind before it gently kisses the earth.
Yes I 'plan' to see Mt Fuji amongst many things. But I will NOT fall. I will feel the earth, delight my eyes with the sunrise as I say hello to the New Year.
This story of mine will be filled with people who's company I have enjoyed and places I will never forget.

Every destination begins with a step as it is commonly said. My first step is within the Halls of Heathrow. Where lights and reflections touch the floor leaving hazy ghosts, and a multitude of languages can be heard. To have the time to learn them all and hear the many stories being whispered by some and announced by others with laughter and smiles. Some feet tapping, arms folded, imitating the eagerness I feel to get up and start my adventure.
Ho! As if heard by the heavens, an announcement is proclaimed, feet everywhere cease and silence as the trumpets blare, signalling for all to begin boarding.
I leave you with these few words as I join the masses.
Tonight I fly,
Tonight I feel the air,
Tonight I shall dance in the wind and kiss the earth when I arrive.

Day 1 Entry 2:
Awakening inside the giant metal beast, motionless wings carrying us through the sky with a thunderous roar. Isn't it a marvel at what we have accomplished. A fantasy explained. This age of science and technology brings wonders to the world, seen by any other this flight is magic, till we bite the apple of knowledge and all illusion falls like a curtain.
I know why we fly, but the magic is oh so fantastic. So I must put up the curtain again, and live like a child watching from wondrous eyes of grandeur. A living dream we can remember forever as we catch glimpses with every blink of an eye.
I much prefer my mind racing with wild explanations as to the current events.

Could it be that we hang in the sky, thread caught on the moon as the earth spins, the sun ushering our arrival? Or could it be as beautiful as sitting in a great whale swimming in the ocean of stars, wave of night blue clouds licking at its belly.
With the London Symphony playing through my ears, urging countless possibilities with every crescendo of the violin or playfulness of fingers on piano. Gods, even this music is a font of wondrous fantastical stories, so much so that I fear I will exhaust my mind with amazing fancies.

I close my eyes as the music slows. The piano whispering to the pace of my heart as it slows. Calm.
I take a breath and open my eyes. The stillness of the night is lovely. That, is that can be said. No flowery words or complicated sonnets of its beauty. The one word describes it in its simplicity most beautifully.
The night is lovely.

I shall return, let this whale rock me to sleep, or is it a moon holding me by a thread?

Day 1 Entry 3:
Drifting out of sleep but for a moment to put pen on paper and express how writing feels.
It feels like...
It makes me feel like I am painting a magnificent rainbow of black and white, every shade an emotion I cant help but show.
My hand must rest, so that my mind can do likewise.
Eyes listen to me and lower your shades. Let the mind wander for a bit, like a cat at night, don’t return till the sun warms my face.

Author's Note

First Draft. First story ever actually. Looking for advice and critique, even harsh critique.
The basis is my own actual journey, but instead of writing it through my eyes, I am writing it through the eyes of a character I created. His opinions and fantastical creatures and ghosts he would meet, based on stories and legends I hear on my actual travel.
Please enjoy and tell me anything and everything.

Reviews

[Isabelle]

Your writing style is amazing. I normally don't really read traveling journals but I find it very interesting and intriguing that you connect your own experience to mythology and legends. I will definitely read the other chapters soon and can't wait to see where this is going. Maybe, though, you could connect the entries. I don't think you really need the subheadings. It would simply look nicer without them. But that is the only critique I have. Great job! I look forward to reading more from you!

[Vasco De Mello]

Thank you so much, I try to take inspiration from classic fantasy authors, their writing stands out to me and I want to write similar.
Thank you for the critique too, I've read a lot of people find it a little unorganized or confusing. I'll have to fix that in the next draft. So far I've posted up 4 days of entries, I plan to have 45 days when I finish.

[Myrim]

I love how descriptive your writing is. It has a certain air to it that I haven't seen before. The attitude is one of a poet. I also like how you date each entry as if it was read straight from a journal. I do think it can be a little confusing and unorganized at times though. Reminds me of someone spilling thoughts across a page. I cannot wait to read the next chapter!

[Vasco De Mello]

Thank you very much, the authors I look up too have this poetic kind of descriptive writing, that I wish to take inspiration from.
A lot of people are saying it reads unorganized and confusing, something I will definitely need to fix once I finish the whole 45days.

[David Jae]

Some interesting 'stream of consciousness' work going on here that lends it a powerful sense of wonder, although it does feel a little confused. I see a lot of potential here.

David Jae.

Search for me on Amazon. You'll be surprised...

[Vasco De Mello]

Thank you, I'm happy you get a sense of wonder, that's how I imagine my character views the world, with great wonder. Once I have finished the whole 45 day journey, I will definitely have to revisit and fix it to be less confusing. Someone suggested connecting the entries and removing the subheadings and this is something I can do once I have finished writing everything down.

[David Jae]

You're welcome.