Backstabber

A familiar tale we can all come to.

Once I smiled at you,
Hunting out that smile,
Refusing your refusal to be happy.
Smiles came in piles.

Once I hugged you,
While you were in an ocean of tears.
I set aside every little thing,
To help you face your fears.

Once I loved you,
As a sister; a friend.
We had one each other's backs,
To hold, and defend.

Once I couldn't be there for you,
Frowns then came in piles,
Fears became reality,
Defense was pressured, shrouding behind

 The hatred we gave one another.

Once I saw you in the hallway,
Looking like a skank,
Padded bras and tight jeans,
Lying that there was money in the bank.

Once I cried for you
I couldn't stop.
You weren't the same.
I ticked your clock.

Once I walked past you.
With an Alpha B***h expression,
Adrenaline filling my ego,
Though my heart scared with Depression.

Once our eyes met.
I was the first to look away.
Funny how things change,
First it was you,

And now I'm more astray.

Once I said I was sorry,
I knew you didn't believe me.
Liar liar pants on fire.
Crushed to embers, blood to deep mahogany.

Once you sat beside me.
I fiddled with my phone,
Read with monotone
The messages you sent me,
Stating you hated me.
Stating you're happy excluding my presence.
Me stating,
Once was now a full moon, is now just a crescent.

Once upon a divine friendship,
Stood a wall.
The only way to get across the wall was to climb.
All would fall.

Author's Note

This one goes to Emily Leanne, she wrote something similar.

Reviews

[Holly]

So strong and powerful are the emotions in this piece. Really great read.

[HorrorMaster]

I thought it was good.

[Star Wolf]

Very impressive poem on a very troubling and painful subject, the betrayal of someone you trusted.

[DrSprinkz73]

You have succeeding in turning something completely generic and over-done into a poem that is Unique! When I first started reading this I rolled my eyes and thought "Oh it's one of those types... Well here we go again." But lo and behold it fell together perfectly and I must commend you for the exquisite rhyming technique you used. Good job! :)

[Aven]

I like how natural the rhyming scheme seems!

[Chipgirl]

filled with lots of emotion. really added efeect to the piece. well done :)

[Tina Kline]

Very painful, a friendship ending.

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

quit catchy but very good indeed

[Miss Coral]

Expressed wonderfully- some of the word choices bothered me, but otherwise this was very nicely done.

-Coral-

[Jonathan De Elvira]

you had captured the mood well.
The horrible thing that could ever happen in friendship is friend's betrayal.