me or the high

me or the high

A Poem by Raven Dye

Power to influence
We will never agree
Admit it to yourself...
hey, can you hear me?
Cant stand the Pressure?
You have to learn your lesson
I just wish our friendship
Was your only obession...
If i asked u to stop
would u let go
Throw it away
and put on a show?
Decide for yourself 
i give u a choice 
Me or the weed 
and use your own voice
Your denial and excusses
make me so sick
But ive come to the rescue
i ask you to quit
I cant even decribe 
The feeling i get
when your eye are blood shot
why take the risk?
Where are you going?
When your so up high 
Do you bother to look down
and see me cry?
I try not to yell 
when your rooms full of smoke
your mind full of screams
but my heart remains broke
I give you this choice
Me or the Weed
Our friendship and memories
the beg and the pleads...

© 2009 Raven Dye


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So many obvious emotions behind it. It starts out angry, becomes sad, and ends in desperation. It's touching, and makes me want to get up in someone's face and flip them off, and also makes me want to cry. Great write!

Posted 15 Years Ago


This piece excellently conveys the pain of having to watch a loved one struggle with substance abuse. My quibbles are very few: There's one misspelling of "excuses" in the 17th line, the word "rooms" in the 7th line from the bottom could use an apostrophe, and a couple of times "I" changes to "i" when the speaker refers to him- or herself (although this might be deliberate.) These minor issues don't subtract at all from the power of the piece, though. Its sentiment screams in frustration and hurt that leap right off the page.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Touching..Great emotion here.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Raven Dye
Raven Dye

Bluefield , WV



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My writing name Raven Dye. I've been threw a lot in my life so far. I'm 16 years young. Im constantly thinking of new poems and stories and most importantly lyrics. Comments are allowable. I dont car.. more..

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