over and over

over and over

A Poem by untoldtruth

over and over

I get on this ride

this ride full of twists

and loops and turns

 

the ride seems to go on

and on

bringing about twist of emotions

There are times where

i want to laugh and throw my hands

up in the air,

those are the best of times

 

But then there are the times where

I want to curl up

and scream

Those are the times

when i  get off this ride

My life goes back

back to its normal pace

 

Days go by and the boredom comes

the need for a thrill arrives.

And so I get on this ride

And here I go

Over And Over.

© 2010 untoldtruth


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... ah ... this verse is a foray into hardcore existentialist philosophy ... the quintessential quest to find the core of one's being ... without falling into the trap of repetition ... or recklessness ... the search for the impeccable and exquisite balance between safety and adventure ... it's a brilliant verse ... rendered with amazing simplicity ... it actually feels like a ride ... until it ends ... and one instinctively goes back to the beginning of the verse and reads again ... and it's a very, very powerful metaphor ... for different people ... it could mean different things ... fantastic verse ... extremely thought-provoking ... the words "twists", "loops" and "turns" have been used really well ... the difference between "the best of times" and the times "when i get off this ride" ... is also brought out really well ... but my favourite lines are "my life goes back" ... and ... "back to its normal pace" ... the subtle way in which the brutality of a "normal life" is expressed is sheer genius ... this is where ... for me as a reader ... the core of this verse resides ... and the last stanza is extremely well rendered too ... particularly the last two lines ... and i really thought the way "over and over" was employed as the first line and the last line ... with the subtle difference being the upper case o in the last line ... created a great impact ... sort of completed the loop ... very skillful ... visually and poetically ... philosophically speaking ... there is no indication of precisely what the narrator is referring to ... but if i take this verse as a metaphor that transcends its context ... then i'd say that may be "normal" needs to be re-defined ... to be something that is exciting enough ... so that a balance is achieved between safety and adventure ... for instance ... if a person does not go for exciting drives "normally" ... gets bored ... and suddenly decides to go for a competitive sporting event in driving ... then the results can make the person "want to curl up and scream" ... but instead if the same person were to re-define normal by going for long drives over the weekend ... to the countryside ... or to another town for an event ... then ... maybe ... just maybe ... boredom won't be inevitable ... but that's just my opinion and i ended up expressing it because this is such a powerful verse that it makes one think and think and think about everything that's "normal" and everything that's "boring" and everything that's "thrilling" ... stunning verse ... deserves much more than a 100 but a 100 shall have to do for now ... :) ...

Posted 14 Years Ago


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We all experiance this idea that a body in motion wants to stay in motion we are all built like this restless want to go

Posted 14 Years Ago


I don't know about philosophy and for some silly reason I don't think you wrote this to be phiosophic but if we were to go into different interpretations this could be about a dramatic guy who is involved with a dramatic girlfriend. Ha. Hows that for interpretation. Nice poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

extrememly good!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is very unique. I like how you compare life to a ride, I've heard that expression before. Though this is the first piece Ive seen using that expression. Good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i really like this, and the title fits perfectly

Posted 14 Years Ago


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... ah ... this verse is a foray into hardcore existentialist philosophy ... the quintessential quest to find the core of one's being ... without falling into the trap of repetition ... or recklessness ... the search for the impeccable and exquisite balance between safety and adventure ... it's a brilliant verse ... rendered with amazing simplicity ... it actually feels like a ride ... until it ends ... and one instinctively goes back to the beginning of the verse and reads again ... and it's a very, very powerful metaphor ... for different people ... it could mean different things ... fantastic verse ... extremely thought-provoking ... the words "twists", "loops" and "turns" have been used really well ... the difference between "the best of times" and the times "when i get off this ride" ... is also brought out really well ... but my favourite lines are "my life goes back" ... and ... "back to its normal pace" ... the subtle way in which the brutality of a "normal life" is expressed is sheer genius ... this is where ... for me as a reader ... the core of this verse resides ... and the last stanza is extremely well rendered too ... particularly the last two lines ... and i really thought the way "over and over" was employed as the first line and the last line ... with the subtle difference being the upper case o in the last line ... created a great impact ... sort of completed the loop ... very skillful ... visually and poetically ... philosophically speaking ... there is no indication of precisely what the narrator is referring to ... but if i take this verse as a metaphor that transcends its context ... then i'd say that may be "normal" needs to be re-defined ... to be something that is exciting enough ... so that a balance is achieved between safety and adventure ... for instance ... if a person does not go for exciting drives "normally" ... gets bored ... and suddenly decides to go for a competitive sporting event in driving ... then the results can make the person "want to curl up and scream" ... but instead if the same person were to re-define normal by going for long drives over the weekend ... to the countryside ... or to another town for an event ... then ... maybe ... just maybe ... boredom won't be inevitable ... but that's just my opinion and i ended up expressing it because this is such a powerful verse that it makes one think and think and think about everything that's "normal" and everything that's "boring" and everything that's "thrilling" ... stunning verse ... deserves much more than a 100 but a 100 shall have to do for now ... :) ...

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I think this poem has a unique way of express how life can be for all of us.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i want to go on that ride of yours too. Sound like fun lol. But yeah I understand the poem. Very good poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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sometimes the best times are when you are off the ride...
You may see such new things when you aren't enjoying life. Take notice of how the world is. "Curl up and scream" Don't you wonder why you would Curl up and scream? There is a cause for this reason. What is wrong with the normal pace? Going at a faster pace will bring back down. At a great downfall. Just as what goes up always go down. The best time in the up. Enjoying the current time. As it is over... regainning the normal thing. Normal isn't bad. There isn't such a thing known as normal anyways. Normal changes and no one is able to define what is normal

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very nice.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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