Lambs become Lions

Look at these people they don't have a clue

Not even an inkling of what may be true

They fight many battles under the pretense of security

Everyday pushing us closer to obscurity

Our leaders they think they have all the power

they are mistaken, cometh the hour

This situation is a result of our choices

we must come together, uniting our voices

The people with power have forgotten their purpose

now let us rise, we can all be usurpers

We all should unite and show some defiance

Remind them they stand on the shoulders of giants

Reviews

[devon]

Wow! This was really great. I feel like you should be writing political speeches or something, lololol.

No, really, this was great! The title is quite nice, too. :)

[quixotic_rose]

The title kinda reminds me of the playoff of "lion and the lamb" type of thing, which is awesome. ALSO. "cometh" might be one of the best words I've seen in forever :) laughed i did. I'm not real perceptive with poetry BUT its powerfully written and its all like "WE WILL HAVE OUR RIGHTS AND WE WON'T LET YOU TAKE THEM!" you know that sort of thing. Well thats what i thought. Loved it!

[Allan Eddings]

An admirable faith in the revolutionary commitment of the people, one I must admit I do not share; the people are more concerned with wealth than nobility, with safety than bravery, with happiness more than greatness. But my own distaste for the people and faith in them aside this work is a lovely write.

It has a power to it, it is insistent and does not relent from its cause. The rhyme is natural and does not appear forced, it rolls from the tongue of the reader with ease. It is hopeful but it does not appear idealistic I think, rather it positions its ideals as the reality.

Very well done, the first of yours I have read and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Regards,
A.E.

[Michael G.]

Good, strong, political poem.
Great flow.
Well thought through. An enjoyable read... and to ponder.

[Melanieshaman]

Love this! I totally got it, nd am with you :)

[Deandra Dawn]

Very nice write...makes a lot of sense. It had excellent flow and rhythm to it as well. Great job! :)

[V.J.C.]

This is very well written and thought provoking in some ways... Thank you for the good read.

[Liderien]

very moving and a wonderful write. You truly have a gift.

[Lydia]

Nice work as always.