Always

my first attempt at acrostic writing

As i look upon your face
Logic leaves with every moment
When i feel your warm embrace
All i want is this atonement
You leave me then with hastened pace
Sadly this is deserved torment

Reviews

[Adora.xo]

I have never attempted this format. Frankly, you've done a wonderful job with it. I love how short and swift it is. Every line is a proverbial punch.

Great work!

~Adora
xoxo

[Michael G.]

A very well written acrostic.

[Crazy Cat Man]

i really didn't realize it was an acrostic. I was just reading it. wow very powerful.

[Shadow Spirit]

Sad.

[MOON]

Beautiful write .

[Barbara Walker]

Good write! Makes me wonder what was done to deserve the torment!

[The White Wolf]

All around good write! I like the whole meaning behind it. The last line is so bittersweet.

[John-Paul H.]

Nice rhyming, synonyms well numbered...Great Job!

[J. Marie]

Very well done!