"Fire and Ice"

 

      "Fire and Ice"

 

He spent his life all alone...out in the cold;

Going around in circles, feeling so terribly old.

She was warmth, love, heat, and molten fire;

Bringing life to those...she did love and admire.

 

He was stone, ice... and molten cold steel.

No real life in his soul...his pain was left, unhealed.

She was life...all fire...torrid and hot.

Everything of value in life...that..he was not.

 

When they met, she tried hard to warm his soul;

But it had been frozen...many long years ago.

Her warmth and passion, ached and longed for his heart.

His icy indifference...often tore her soul apart.

 

When ever they did happen, by chance to meet;

She thought he responded at once...to her heat.

At times his slight response, lit up his whole face;

Many others time, he would only show a trace.

 

For so many years...they both remained alone;

One cold and indifferent, the other passionate...all hope gone.

She hoped one day to reach him, to give him her love;

But it seemed she needed help...from the "One" above.

 

How can one care so much...the other be so cold?

Why must they remain alone continuing to grow old?

Why couldn't she see...that he did not have a heart?

With so much love to give...couldn't he accept a part?

 

You see, one is the "moon", the other is the "sun."

He reflects the suns light...as he has no light of his own.

 

 

  Valentine

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

This a classy write, Kathie. I was interested, start to the great finish! Thank you for these last few minutes!

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ah, nicely written and a great ending... the moon and the sun, one yields warmth and the other can only reflect...

[Valentine]

Yes, like a lot of todays relationships. Kathie

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I know I've read this somewhere before but still this is good it's like visiting a friend well done Bratgirl!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very well written how one cannot make it without the other! great imagery!

[Emily B]

oh, wow. Loved that last line!

[Chris38]

This could be metaphorical as in a realtionship where one feds off the other but could also be literal. Great poem.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Celestial companions; apart, yet dependant on each other! Such is the way of unrequited love.
One all fired up and the other indifferent to it all!

Excellent use of imagery.

Bless you!
Phillip

[Michael X]

Valentine, this is sentimental, warm and gentle, your words flow soft and poetic,
just like moonlight, lovely work :) A pleasure to read.

[Bent Dragon (Eric)]

I quite liked the poem. It has a nice style to it and as David said it has a lovely ending that adds a lot of meaning to the lines before. To get the whole effect you almost have to read it twice.
I do have to wonder about those triple dots of yours. While I understand they are are pauses I have to wonder if you didn't perhaps go a little overboard with them. Try reading it aloud and see how it sounds if you read them as line breaks/pauses. I was reading aloud and at times it felt awkward.

[David Lewis Paget]

A bit of a departure here into personification, Valentine. I must admit, I like it. It's necessary to read it through once again, after you've got to the punch lines at the end. Second time through it becomes more obvious. Those three dots of yours for pauses are a bit of a trademark now. I don't know anyone else who uses them so prolifically. Aren't commas good enough for you? (lol)
David.