"Life's Castaways"

 

            "Life's Castaways"

 

She had learned

the cost of his pain

and rejection...

so long ago.

 

But it would return

and enter her world,

as cold as

winter's new falling snow.

 

Soon fresh hurt would come,

as she struggled to be...

a weak floundering ship upon...

a stormy wind tossed sea.

 

For pain and loss linger inside,

and rejection lies in the heart.

As the mind asks "why can't life's

castaways...have a new start?"

 

    Valentine

Reviews

[R Smith]

indeed why do life's castaway's never seem to get a break but maybe they have to learn and grow, when this does not happen first time maybe a second time comes around so they get another chance to take the lesson in, i suppose its a possibility, your poem throws up many possibilities thank you Kathie :)

[Valentine]

Luckily in my family we had no castaways, here in Michigan's north, my church is full of kids living in foster homes or with grand parents, sad circumstances. Most just want to be loved.

[Shane Mohamed]

Hey Valentine, take it easy. If you keep grieving, you'll melt your heart in sorrow, and become bitter. You have to let go, eventually. Good days will come.

[Valentine]

This is an older write. I am going through my writes and hope to get them all on someday. When I wrote them for the paper it was much easier. Valentine

[Sami Khalil]

Life is full of acceptances and rejections. How we deal with either can make a big difference. Excellent...:).........

[Valentine]

Perhaps we are meant to learn from them. Kathie

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).....

[ANTO]

This is timeless writing Kathie. Was it inspired by the movie Castaway may I ask (just because of the date)

Im gladd you RR'd this to me - thanks :)

[Valentine]

No, I did not see the film. It was more about a close family member. Kathie

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful poetry and I like the poetry that ends with a question.
"As the mind asks "why can't life's
castaways...have a new start?"
The above line is the question most of us ask. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Valentine]

Many thanks for reading my scribble. Kathie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Kathie.

[DoormanDan]

I like the way you set up the rhyme scheme in this piece, and the rhymes themselves dont feel forced. Theres a lot of meaning behind this piece. I interpreted it as being about somebody with a broken heart trying to move on after being rejected. Many people can relate to this. Once again, you have done spectacularly. :)

[Valentine]

Not just broken hearted, broken spirit, or a poor person etc. Kathie

[~]

it seems like the captain is not so sure whether to stay or abandon ship. I loved your use of the tossing sea to portray the feelings inside of her heart.

[Valentine]

In every life there seems to come a point that we have to start all over again. Everyone deserves a second chance at happiness. Kathie

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Loved this. Great write!

[Greg the Bard]

This is more a story writen in verse style. I see little rhyming but the story of a broken heart is very strong. I love the images. You should take a look at "Barritt Brown" she is a master at this. I love the flow and the pace. Well done!

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a sad piece and it takes time to heal from some old wounds. Beautiful but sad.
hugs
Debby