" Coronation "

 

        " Coronation "

 

The door to life opened,

You walked through

Encompassed love

As it surrounded you.

Giving her the world

In a circlet, a golden ring.

You ceded your soul

And became a king!

 

  Valentine

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Pure Wisdom of years. Heart to intertwine and be one forever.

[Valentine]

Thank you Smitty, perhaps not for a lifetime, but for many wonderful years. Kathie

[R Smith]

that's just lovely Kathie, a really heartfelt good type weepy love song, brilliant :)

[Valentine]

Not meant to be weepy, some men give up a lot to marry the one they love. If the relationship offers more...he might feel blessed. Kathie

[Warren Daniel II]

What a beautiful poem, short but speaks volumes, I enjoyed this poem so much you really should consider making a longer version. Great Job

[Valentine]

Thanks for your kind response. Valentine

[~]

WOW... "ceded your soul" that is just about everything that one wants in a relationship. I love the analogy of the coronation with the wedding, one with the crown on the head and the other with the ring on the finger.

[Valentine]

Yes, and I expect many wish for this but not all are fortunate enough to find it..Kathie

[Chris]

Wedding days and memories...

[Valentine]

Yes, he gave up a lot more than I did. I am just thankful for all of the years we had. Now it is time to go forward and taking the first step will not be easy. Valentine

[Roshan Nair]

Nice piece kathie! I loved the succinctness with which you get such powerful delivery of emotions. The message in the poem is very beautiful, there's a glow to each line. cheers

[Valentine]

Thank you for reading my write. Kathie

[D. Earl Barnes]

Short and sweet. Makes me think of birth.

[Valentine]

A wedding ring makes you think of birth? Valentine

[D. Earl Barnes]

haha. No. " the door to life opened" door = birth canal/ "encompassed love" = love for a child/ "ceded your soul" = becoming a body.... as far as the circlet.. I don't know what I was thinking.

[wordman]

yes,king Arthur or king sombody

[Valentine]

No, I was thinking of my husband Lee when I wrote this, the gold band is still on my finger. Kathie

[wordman]

I know Kathie who you wrote it for

[cassandra ziemba]

i love it! its soothing and calm, very sweet!

[Valentine]

Thank you. Kathie

[Kimberly Miller]

So sweet and simple! Absolutely no more words needed!

[Valentine]

Thank you. Kathie