Echoed Thoughts

Thinking too much this week on the family that I have lost...too young and too soon..mom and dad, I love and miss you, Spence, Daniel, Bill and Lauretha [siblings]..I ache to see you and hear your voices.

       

        Echoed Silence

 

Old thoughts echoing through my mind,

Of a far away place, in a long ago time.

Voices that once spoke...are no longer heard.

Favorite memories...only unspoken words.

 

Emptiness encloses...then completely surrounds;

Locking the doors to any movement or sound.

Breath...that sounded 'life' into the ear,

If breathing is gone...how can there be life here?

 

Feeling and touching...than silent cries.

Heart's broken...no more words of good-bye.

Searching and seeking...for a familiar face,

That the sound of silence...has now replaced.

 

Setting here longing...to just hear your voice,

Why is death...Gods final choice.

 

   Still loving and missing all of you, I

will see you when I join you in Heaven.

         VALENTINE

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Valentine,
"Echoed Thoughts" Your vulnerable and honest revelations just really round out who you are as a person and I love it!
This writing gives voice to the layers we all carry of past experiences and people once real as today. Interesting too how memories are so much a part of who we are inside of ourselves and the effort to manage these inner realities.
Precious writing like this is important as others will find strength in shared experience as they empathize and are given a place of their own memories.
I hope that your memories are softening with time.
Bless you,
Kathy

[SmittyJas]

Passionate forever kind of love I missed it in my first lifetime I will dream of it tonight and make it last each night after that. Divorce separates what was going to be eternal or an infinity love affair.

[Falling Leaf.]

So far you're one of the few authors whose rhyming poetry I can bear to read, most of them I quit halfway through, it's just so easy for rhymes to feel forced. However this was natural and beautiful. I'm sorry for your loss, I know words will never do sometimes, but I hope the tides of longing creep back eventually, touching write, thanks for sharing~

[Valentine]

You are very welcome. Losing my husband last year was the heart breaker for me. It is taking time to want to get back to living without him. Kathie

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

the endless emotion, the sadness! that reeks in our very being at loss is displayed for all to see, well done, good read.

[Valentine]

I will just be glad when the loss of my husband eases in my heart. I would never wish him back as sick as he was that last two weeks. Kathie

[R Smith]

beautiful and sad Kathie, I too have many in heaven and long for the day to see them again :)

[Valentine]

It helps to know that they went to Heaven doesn't it? Kathie

[DoormanDan]

This is a poem that makes my heart want to cry. I cant put this any other way; you are a PHENOMENAL poet!

[Valentine]

Thank you for reading my work. Kathie

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand the poem.
"Setting here longing...to just hear your voice,
Why is death...Gods final choice."
Somethings are not for us to understand. We will learn on the final journey. I like the perfect ending to the excellent poetry dear Poet.
Coyote

[Valentine]

My husband and family members are there and I miss each one of them. It is sad to be left behind. Kathie

[Coyote Poetry]

We will catch-up one day. We are here for reasons. Yesterday I took my Grandson to Mcdonald. Was a black man sitting alone and he smiled at me. I refilled my drinks and he requested food. I bought him food and drink. I told him. I was sorry for your day and my brother. I hope you have better day. All of us are needed. A smile, a kind word or gift of food. We need you dear friend. I appreciate you.

[Valentine]

Thank you for feeding that man. I do a lot with battered women and the disabled. Also carry cooked ready to eat food down to a woman in a wheel chair. God's work is never done. Kathie

[Coyote Poetry]

We must do what we can. A small gift of food and kind words. Can change a life.

[Leslie Philibert]

May I be pedantic and say you made the right decision to put the title out of speech marks ? A small point, I know, but it reads better. I would put God in the possessive too, God`s final choice. I like this, as I like Valentine`s work, that is always sincere.

[Valentine]

Thank you for pointing that out. I always thought His was anyway. Kathie

[Valentine]

Leslie, my mom was a poet and writer for Detroit newspapers. I try to lay things out like she did. She was the original Valentine. Kathie

[armin]

a heartfelt piece of poetry, the opening phrases were marvelously written.

well done.

armin. ...

[Valentine]

Thank you. Valentine

[Woody]

sad and touching. they say that pain and sadness produce the most beautiful and heartfelt poetry.
this is a very good one. be strong Valentine!

[Valentine]

Thank you for your comments. Kathie