Love's Flame

Very old write.

           "Love's Flame"

 

Drawn nearer to you, like a moth to a flame;

Then comes the heat, over and over again.

In ecstasy...eyes wide open, wings fluttering,

Not feeling the fire, not the scars widening.

 

Burning up in flames too hot to the touch;

Destroying myself, yet I crave you so much.

Like a thirsty man...really needing a drink,

I need your sweet fire, to carry me over the brink.

 

Love burning so warm, too hot to ever die out;

Carrying me places I will forever see...no doubt.

Now I see another, being drawn to your fire,

Consuming your heat...luring you to go higher.

 

How could I know...our flame could slowly die;

Spoiling every chance this moth had ever again fly?

Flying into the flames...now forever to burn;

Not having the will to go on nor ever to learn.

 

Slowly I see her...drawn into your blazing heat;

Love words whispered, again... promises so sweet.

Knowing that one day, she... will burn up too,

As soon as you draw, another fool close to you.

 

Once burnt...love...is never the same,

How can one learn, to trust, ever again?

For after a while...old flames will slowly die;

And the fire cools, in the bed where you lie.

 

Never to trust, or fly into another's flame;

Heart so broken...you die of the shame.

 

                 Valentine

 

© 2011 Valentine

Author's Note

Has been on the site since 2011, but not published for readers.
As a lot of mine are not ready for you to read. Kathie
Do not want to overwhelm you.

Reviews

[FIN]

I feel I have read the first half of this before, from another user; the "moth to a fire subject" is used quite often. Which makes sense about the overlap (I'm sure many writers have used it before your time, too.)

But I liked the direction you took it in after the fact: A demolisher of love. A heart-breaker. A seducer. And then coming to a sad conclusion of one feeling vulnerable to ever love again.

Fire can symbolize destruction, the entire piece so fitting to its essence.

Lovely read, Ms. Valentine.

[Valentine]

This was published in the newspaper before this site was started.

[FIN]

Plus, there's that saying "There's nothing new under the sun." Which I don't find entirely true, but you definitely put your spin on this classic observation of life.

I may also take a go at the "moth to flame" bit. I have some ideas and spin-offs, which may be fun to play around with!

Much love.

LR

[Valentine]

When it warms up, look at your porch light when it is on. We all might see those moths drawn to light. Write away. Kathie

[Tony Jordan]

I could almost hear the "pzzzzzzzztt" of her wings being scorched on the raw flames that once warmed her and the very same flame which drew her in.
A tragic tale of love found but misunderstood to be the real thing - instead it was toxic and deadly.
Your rhyming is impeccable Valentine.

[Valentine]

Tony, reading your review I think I heard her cry OUCH! Thank you for reading my write. Kathie

[Tony Jordan]

Keep writing Kathie. I see you have a bug of your own intent on pestering. I hope he gets his wings zapped soon.
(((HUGS)))

[Valentine]

If his name is Leroy Sinclair, he is pestering quite a few. Some have even stopped this site. Kathie

[Sami Khalil]

Amazingly hot and romantic with whispered promises to love and cherish. Powerful...:)...............

[Valentine]

Thank you Sami for taking the time to read my scribble. Kathie

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ...::::)))))