Nightmare

idk. Something just popped in my head and I just wrote it down. It was a dream I kept having for like 3 days straight.

I closed my eyes just in time to not see. But that was not enough. I could hear it. Screams echoing inside my head. Beckoning, begging for mercy. But there was not one good soul intact to be such savior.I did nothing else but fer for my own well being. I didn't know who I was at that time. Was I the murderer or was it someone else that was so miserable that seeked vengence against humankind? I see my mom get killed right in front of my very own eyes. My dad leaves as peacefully and melancholy as he possibly can. As his soul dissapates toward the sky, I sit straight up and let out a piercing scream. I'm saved. I'm not in that world anymore. I drift gently back to sleep. More screams than before. Blodd smeared everywhere. I'm back.

Author's Note

Do you think it's too dramatic?

Reviews

[Katie Ceas]

Nice effort! Keep on at it.

[X]

i don't think it's too dramatic at all actually. it's not too much but it's not really dull. i think you gave it a very nice effect and it was constructed very nicely. you spelled blood wrong on the last line but that's really the only thing i found wrong with it to be completely honest.
good job.
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i hope i see more of your work on here soon!
monica.

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Nope. I think it has just the right amount of drama as anything else. The story is really good. I can actually see all these images in my head. Your wording is very good. I liked it that you changed how every sentence was constucted. I'd hate having one of those dreams, although I can't say I haven't seen some very gruesome moments.