Like a Mouse’s Dim Mind

Like a Mouse’s Dim Mind

A Poem by Valandil93
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A poem about war

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Running across to join the play,
The kings and leaders decided to do.
For when came the month of May,
They fought to make the world new.

Little did they know of who was in charge,
Nor the stakes of such a match.
But it was a man with wisdom very large,
And a spirit more powerful than the batch.

He was an outsider,
A man who lived on his own.
He saw at hand what was the matter,
And quickly it caused him to groan.

The outsider watched from his house,
And saw the war unfolding in front of him.
It reminded him of the mouse,
Of how their minds were dim.

© 2011 Valandil93


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The only known species that undergo warfare on a large scale are humans and ants. Hm.

Anyway, the brevity of this poetic story on barbarism was well-executed (pun intended). I appreciate this line: "they fought to make the world new." It says quite a lot. Also the ambiguity makes it nicely universal in application. Some of the rhyme in this piece seems a bit forced though. Otherwise, great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Its good (:(:

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like this poem, when I read it I got taken far back in time... I like it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The only known species that undergo warfare on a large scale are humans and ants. Hm.

Anyway, the brevity of this poetic story on barbarism was well-executed (pun intended). I appreciate this line: "they fought to make the world new." It says quite a lot. Also the ambiguity makes it nicely universal in application. Some of the rhyme in this piece seems a bit forced though. Otherwise, great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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