Bullshit

Angriness.

How come you can rely on it?

How come it’s satisfying you?

It would only be annoying me…

And it would just make me crying.

I am not that deep,

And far away from perfect,

Why can’t you look at me?

And just pretend you want me?

I’m sick of this insane and truly madly circle,

Why can’t you be with me and make this small and single miracle?

You busy to your work and all the other girlfriends,

Why wouldn’t you be with me and strict the all the other frameworks?

                            

C’mon and let’s play the game, it’s not the way you like it?

C’mon let’s make a frame, I know you gonna lie to me…

And in the end of day, I know you gonna leave me,

But after all of it, it is the only way to please me.

Reviews

[Vaiduka]

Brian, there are various type of relationships and level of complication varies as well. I would say it is more illegal relations when both sides need to accept other parties participating. And nevertheless the hopeless love is involved here too. Despite of disparate wish to have proper relationships, pain and heartache of other parties involved the only way to get a bit of happiness is that bit of complicated relationships.

Do I make any sense?

[Khance]

You really do confuse me with your poems, the last two lines in the few I've read have all made me re-read the entire thing. I originally thought that she wanted to try for a baby, but the talk of the guy having other girlfriends, I thought that it maybe was her desire to have a relationship with him and to tie him down.

The game, I thought was you talking about the commitment of a relationship. I'm not sure, there are parts of it I couldnt understand very well.

"Why wouldn’t you be with me and strict the all the other frameworks?" - This didnt make much sense to me. Overall, pretty good work on it. I like stuff that makes me think, although I'm a story writer, not a poet, so my opinion isn't that great to go on.