Whispers in the rain

Childhood which blooms along

A paperboat, emotions float

Sings rain, a beautiful song

Dancing droplets, rythm so strong

Teenage knocks, love unconditional

Friendship fights, surreal relations

Soaking in the rain, sighs and tears

Faded away in the ambience clear....

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

a great title, and wonderful imagery throughout. it is so full of reminiscence. it evokes memories of hard times in my teenage years, memories i now look back on and laugh. your use of language is superb too, and my only criticism is that i wish this poem was longer. look forward to more of your work.

[Vagi]

Haha I want to add verse about adult and old life too! I would add someday for sure.. (may be 2-3 weeks or 2-3 yrs later, idk)

[Dave W.]

I have been reading a couple of other poems about rain, I like your use of rain that brings blooming flowers and lets boats float. Good poem.

[Vagi]

Thank you for the feedback

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This poem makes me feel so lucky...I have a childhood friend since third grade...we are still close...the rain, the sighs, the tears....but the friendship still there in the ambiance clear.
Nicely spoken, Vagi....did you mean "rhythm"?

[Vagi]

You are really lucky.. I too have childhood friend though.. but I lost some too..... yes I meant rhythm

[Soren]

The first two lines bring children in. Rain sets the mood and I see children playing in the rain. The rain dances with them. The second stanza about teen years and the difference as friends fight and all relationships become more distant. Lovely write

[Vagi]

Thank you so much for reading :)

[poetgurl]

WOW, this is wonderful, I feel emotions

[Vagi]

Hehe Thank you