Bulletproof.

Bulletproof.

A Poem by Vada
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This was when I felt I had no choice but to give up on love but my best friend .. he helped me through things.

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This heart was beating.
Then it was broken.
I believed for a while there was no other way to fix it.
Till a good friend can a long and helped me live and move on.
They promised to me they would never hurt me and they never have.
Though I knocked them down many times.
They still stand at my side.

They told me these words.
"There are those you can trust you just haven't found them yet."
So now I will walk on day by day.
And stronger my heart will grow.
Till soon I will be smart enough and strong enough to try again.

My heart will soon be bulletproof.

© 2009 Vada


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Well, hearts are made to be broken; it's in the mending that we grow and move forward. Well done write.

For a teenager you have a remarkable grasp on placing emotion into your words, so I hope you continue to write. I did spot a line I want you to fix:

Till a good friend can a long and .....

"Till" is actually a term used for money, like in a drawer of a cash register. The word "until" used in a poetic form is spelled "Til" or 'Til if you want to show there are letters missing. I believe you meant "came along" not can a long, right?

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Well, hearts are made to be broken; it's in the mending that we grow and move forward. Well done write.

For a teenager you have a remarkable grasp on placing emotion into your words, so I hope you continue to write. I did spot a line I want you to fix:

Till a good friend can a long and .....

"Till" is actually a term used for money, like in a drawer of a cash register. The word "until" used in a poetic form is spelled "Til" or 'Til if you want to show there are letters missing. I believe you meant "came along" not can a long, right?

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very Good poem. In this part
Till a good friend can a long and helped me live and move on.
Did you move come a long.
Shows that friends will be always be there through thick and thin.
=]

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Vada
Vada

Simi Valley, CA



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My Name Is Vada. I'm 15. And I've been through plenty of things in my life... The only release I found was in writing.. So I've been writing since I was 11. more..

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