That Easy!

The feeling when someone says a thing which hurts you.

The price for the love or care,

why isn't it fair?

when one cares for you,

you just rip out their heart and pierce through,

and then,

sorry i didn't mean it,

sorry i said it by mistake,

sorry i was in tension,

hey sorry i was just kidding,

number of sorry comes to our face,

with a bunch of lies without any base,

we forgive them,

but the scar remains the same.

history repeats again,

and a sorry puts it all in vain.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[The Exiled Wolf]

This piece describes a frustrating situation that "friends" are taking us lightly - they don't understand how much damage words can do, or they just don't care. The word choice is sincere and the grudge is oozing out naturally. Just a few suggestions here:
The price for the love or care,
why isn't it fair --I guess you could put a pause here (e.g. a question mark) coz the meaning is complete.
when someone shows their affection by taking care of you, -- I find this slightly redundent. Try "When one shows you their affection" or "When one care for you"
you just rip their heart and cut in a pieces few, -- "a pieces few" does not sound right - you may want to try "you just rip out their hearts and pierce through" if you want to keep the rhyming
and then, -- You may try to remove this line and start a new stanza and see which one you like better.
sorry i didn't mean it,
sorry i said it by mistake,
sorry i was in tension,
hey sorry i was just kidding,-- Try putting quotation marks for each of these. The repetition here is very powerful. You may want to put the most hurting line in the last line to build up the frustration.
number of sorry comes to your face,
with a bunch of lies without any base,
you forgive them, -- "you" has been used to represent the bad guy so being consistent may help avoid confusion.
but the scar mark remains the same. -- "Scar" is already a mark so maybe take away the word "mark"?
history repeats again,
and a sorry puts it all in the vain. -- just "in vain" would do!
These are mere suggestions in the perspective of a peer instead of a critic (just an amateur here), and no offense is intended - this piece is yours so you have the full right to take or leave the suggestions.

Yours truly,
Wolf

[It Will Change]

Thank you so much :D
i'll surely do some changes as suggested and
again thanks a lot... i needed this kinda help :D
thanks a ton.

[Malvika]

It's a good poem and yes I agree that many a times people speak without thinking that it might hurt us and scars us forever as it always gets stuck in the back of the mind and they might have just uttered there true feeling and are just fake friends. You could experiment a little more with the poem though . A Great poem ,loved it

[Anjali]

That's so beautiful! You really brought out the emotions in the poem, it seems so simple, but it has such a deep message behind it. Just beautiful!

[It Will Change]

Thank you soo much :D

[Anjali]

You're very welcome!

[Sonakshi Arora]

This is the truth that can be found in almost all the relationships today They even have a name for it -lust
A great poem and thanks for sharing!

[It Will Change]

Yes almost in every relation now ...thank you for reading :)

[Surya]

Conveying is an art I guess, everyone has their own voice, some are unique some just convey, some just tell them...
But according to me, words should let reader feel them as their own memory then we can say our writes has effect...
And obviously i felt, I enjoyed....:)

[It Will Change]

Thank you Surya :D

[Manasa.L]

I agree with Ria, it looks monotonous when the words keep repeating. You can avoid doing it. Except that, the words convey your feeling and heartbreak very beautifully. Good writing.

[It Will Change]

yes i had the same thought that, repetition might make it dull but still i did it coz it gave the feeling which i had to mention.
But i'll remember it from now on.
Thank you :)

[Mr.Writer]

Nice job! :) I really could feel the emotions you were trying to convey! :) Maybe like Ria said, you can change it a bit so it doesn't have to repeat :)

[It Will Change]

Thank you... and again i'll definitely remember it hence forth :)

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Ardra]

sorry i didn't mean it,
sorry i said it by mistake,
sorry i was in tension,
hey sorry i was just kidding,

Maybe you can just write..
Sorry..
I dint mean it..
I made a mistake
I was lost
I won't repeat it..
Guess in this way you don't have to repeat sorry so many times

Am no good editor...just only suggestions :)
Its a good attempt to convey what you felt..

[It Will Change]

I had the same thought while writing ..but i was not able to feel it, so i repeated it. But thank you, next time i'll surely take care about this. :)

[Ray Gal]

This is a good writing and somehow I felt what you want to convey.

[It Will Change]

Thank you :)
Keep reading.