THE LITTLE GIRL

A poem/short story about a girl who lost her parents at sea and were then rescued. Hope you all like it.

The little girl was sitting lonely on the ground,

Crying because her parents haven't been found.

They were lost at sea during a very heavy storm,

With water ice cold, they struggled to keep warm.

The little girl was scared because it's been too long,

She is doing whatever she can to still stay strong.

The little girl was asking everyone

If they had seen her mum and dad.

Nobody could give her a real answer,

And suddenly they started to feel bad.

The little girl had no idea what to think,

Whether the boat was saved, or did it sink?

The little girl then went and sat by the shore,

She went to do this so she can cry some more.

The little girl looked out to sea,

With the view black as night.

The little girl then looked up 

And smiled with such delight.

The little girls parents were 

Then brought onto the sand.

The little girl then grabbed

Onto each one of their hand.

The little girls family walked off together.

The little girl was now more happy than ever.

Author's Note

Please view and review.
I would like to see what everyone thinks of this.
Thank you.
enjoy :)

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Its great babe another great write about something other then love.
Very creative thought to write about something like this its different.
I think it was great you know i love it your getting even better as a writer and im so impressed by your work, and the things your coming up with.
I love you so much mwa xxxooo

[mark]

Thank you sweetheart :)
I know i dont know how i came up with it, it was just a random idea last night i thought of :)
Well thanks babe i think i am getting better :) im glad you like it thanks so much hun :)
I just need to write that one about my nightmares i had but i can't think of anything yet.
I love you too :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

yer i think you could write about something like that easy that would be great :)
i love you more :)

[mark]

thanks babe :)

[Half Dream]

I like this sad at the beginning with happy ending! Very sweet! :)

[mark]

thank you :)

[Sarah Lynn]

Awwwhhh! What a sweet poem! I was so sad at first , im so happy it had a turn around for the ending. Great rhyming in this poem and flowed so well! Great job!

[mark]

thanks im glad you liked it :) yeah i had to put a happy ending in it :) thanks for reading and reviewing i have heaps more if u like to read them :)

[zaneybear]

awwh, I love this, I like the transition from it being sad to ending really happy :)

[mark]

thank you so much :)
I'm glad you like it :)

[NA]

awww such a sweet tale....the picture really grabs at your heart too, great job! really enjoyed :) x

[mark]

Glad you enjoyed it :)
Thank you so much :)

[SineadJulia]

I liked the feel of this piece. Almost like a fable that one would read to children before bed. It has many lovely qualities and I like the simplicity of it.

[mark]

thanks very much :)

[annabellee]

good poem, I liked the story you told here, very touching and heartfelt. It made me feel really sorry for that little girl but I'm glad it ended well.
Great write :)

[mark]

awww thank you Anna :) means allot.
cimmonne actually told me to start writing about other things, i didn't think i could do it but i think i didn't do too bad.

[annabellee]

not at all, she was right about it :)
you're most welcome :)

[mark]

awww thank you :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome, again :)