Valentine's Day

I loved you

You loved me

It was always what we thought it to be

We got married immediatley

Then on febuary 14th you left me

Now standing over your grave I say"Happy Annerversary, Honey"

Author's Note

Say what you please!

Reviews

[~crazy Beautiful~]

This is so sad, such a brutal ending, a tragedy. I feel like the words were missing some more of the emotion, somewhat less descriptive of the love you had. This is a beautifully brutal piece, i would never wish such a loss on anyone.
This piece don't get me wrong is quite good as it stands, but upon some expansion could be amazing.
thank you for entering my contest.

[Rachel Koepke]

the rhyming and shortness of it was great and unexpected. very enjoyable!thx for entering my contest
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starrunner

[Catastrophe]

how so much can be said in just a few lines
is a beautiful thing, this just brings tears to my heart....
and yet it is so beautiful

[Kara Emily Krantz]

liked this! ha, wasn't what i was expecting. the rhyme scheme was gentle and wellchosen. and what a sad ending! i liked how you kept it short - it worked well.

[Jason]

Nice twist. Might want to run a spell check though. I like the 'straight and to the point'.

[Damian Alan Gray]

That was nice and grim, just the way any good piece of dark prose should be. I liked it very much, but you may wish to revisit the meter. Doing away with unnecessary wording could give it a bit more impact. For instance, in the last line 'Now, standing over your grave I say "Happy Anniversary, Honey"' you could change it to read:
"Now, I stand over your grave,
Happy Anniversary."
Just a thought, and I may be completely mistaken. In either case, it's a nice piece of work.

[Too Simple a Simon]

Ouch! Very sad.

T'SaS

[Wolfwind Words]

Smile! fading to Sad....
I liked it though... a tragic flip of fate, I couldn't imagine what that would be like, love and loose so quickly. Yet i suppose that stuff like this does happen in life.
Good read!

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Great write... very powerful...

[JC Fox]

LOL I love the bossy author's note. All joking aside it was a great write, good job, now did they leave you or did you help them leave? Just kidding great write good job short sweet simple and to the point.