Haunting

I got inspired to write this poem by listening to "Haunted" by Evanescnece....Listen to it onmy profile

I feel you haunting me

I feel you lurking

Everywhere I go

Your intoxicating

I feel you mocking me

I feel you smiling

What am I suppose to do if you're not leaving?

Author's Note

I don't know if the first two lines are the same as the other one but...

Reviews

[L.G. Knight]

this is short and sweet but it packs a goliath sized punch on its david size structure nicely done! thanks for entering it in the "Sleepless Night" poetry Competition...

~Frances~

[Wolfwind Words]

I envisioned an image of oneself in the mirror or ones shadow. Something that is always there and never leaves. A constant reminder of the inner fears and desires. Great Job!

[Marie]

I think we're gonna have to be friends, but this was really excellent AND I love the flow and the way you formatted it. Great job.

[Imperfection]

Haunting memories and stubborn thoughts are what stands in the way when we think that we want to move away from someone but can't.

I have felt that way many times and I have come to the conclusion that I think because I want to think and perhaps I haunt the thoughts; its not that the thoughts haunt me.

I loved this poem. I think all of us will be able to relate to this.
Thanks a lot for entering this into my contest.

[Tempest]

I love the last line, afterall what could one do... great job.

[Brianna Brie]

I like this one a lot. Perhaps it is because he is lurking about me too! I like the chaotic writing in different fonts it increases the frantic feel of the piece.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Errrr...os it a host your refuring to or a stalker?...I would go for a ghost something it make me feel when I read this. I nice write and a great song to be inspired by. Keep them coming!

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This is really good.... I enjoyed reading it... I like the wording you use. "I feel you mocking... I feel you smiling" I really like these lines! Great job!

[Brette Medb]

It's different, it's sad and it's questioning... all the great components for poetry. I liked the lst line and the feeling of being so sucked under by all the emotions.. great write,

Brette

[John Stussy]

Hmmm, well I think it's GREAT! Sad, and it reminds me of not just one but several of my friends. I really like the formatting you did, italicizing to add a bit more of a punch to it all.