Dream In My Dream

" Dream In My Dream "

Every night I had a dream

A dream about you

It's not a dream of love

Or romance  with you

But , in which you are remorselessly slayed

By those four men appareled in black

 

I can remember your dark red eyes

Filled with tear and anguish

Pink nose and grinding teeth

As they are going to crunch each other

Your grim pale face

Justifying the dry cold blood

It's a panorama of midnight park 

you were on foot and I was in a car

walking alone , you asked me for a lift  

when I just ignored you and passed by 

HELP ME !  as you cried

still resonating in my head, since that night 

Who are you ? why you visit my dream ?

Are you some evil spirit or just an incubus ?

I never met you or ever seen you

Then why ? why you disturb my kip ?

I beg you, leave my soul and my mind

Please leave me alone

It's been a week

Since you last retreated my dream

But wait , what's this ?

Why this background is changing itself 

Oh ! no , it's the same dream 

it's a dream in my dream 

~uTkArSh SiNgH

Reviews

[Puffle]

When I read the first two lines I was all like "UUuuhhhh....O_O" but then I continued and I was going "OH!" XD I'm such a dork....

But, anyway, really interesting poem! I started getting in to it and was really intrigued O_O What inspired you to write something like this?

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks CC .......what inspired me i think my nightmares .......i just convert them into a poem and add a character to it ........just as simple as that ..........:)

[Puffle]

Interesting O_O I take my random nightmares and throw them into a random plot, then never turn into much of anything, I have a huge box in my room full of random notes etc, I should really put more up here...O_o

[Utkarsh Singh]

its a matter of talent ...i can convert them into poems you convert them into notes .....better to take a plot then fix your nightmare into that and you will see birth of a small ,boring line .....
by the way i think that i should also note my nightmare somewhere........heheh ....:D

[Puffle]

I'm not much of a poem person, I tend to lean towards fiction writing. Although, somehow, I earned first place in a Youth Writing contest for a Churches of God thing O_o No clue how I managed that, but ANYWHO

[Utkarsh Singh]

congo .....:D

[Puffle]

.....? O_o

[Utkarsh Singh]

earned first place in a Youth Writing contest for a Churches of God ..:P

[Shubhangi]

first three paragraphs are spine chilling...very well written....really good imagination!

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks for this awesome review shubhangi .....:)

[Penny]

Read a poem like this one on this forum earlier and I like yours better. You have expressed everything without actually revealing complete truth of the incident. Mystery makes it better and so does the language. Great going.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot penny .......btw can you plz send me the link where you earlier read this poem

[Penny]

Not this poem, one with a similar subject. Actually i don't remember the link. Wasn't oneofmy friends'

[Utkarsh Singh]

ok ...no problem .... :)

[Brook]

This is very intriguing. I've never read anything quite like it, i think you did a brilliant job. I look forward to reading more from you.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks for the inspiring review brookly .......you can check out my other poems also .......... :)

[Parimal Pratyush]

A society where one in a hundred stops by to help a victim, this is bound to happen my friend. Beautifully expressed.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot parimal ........a true fact .... :/

[Nena]

You should really work on the Tenses and Grammar. Either than that, a good poem :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

trying my best nena .... plz PM me so that i can check them out . :/

[Namrata]

dream in my dream...loved that line. Gives me chills. Nice work.

[Utkarsh Singh]

it's written for releasing the mental stress at last .....thanks for the review namrata .......you are free to check out my other stuff also ........:)

[Namrata]

sure I will.

[Utkarsh Singh]

kk ...... :D

[Ayushi]

Good imagination and interesting write :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot ayushi ....... : )

[Life Pal]

What a scary dream.Don't watch ghost serials too much otherwise these type of dream will only come hehe.Good work :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

hheheh .......ok sana .....i'll mark your words ........thanks for the review ... :D

[Life Pal]

Ur welcome :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

................. :D

[Matching Socks]

Great imagination! Loved your poem!

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot Anče ..:)

[AprilRN1210]

nice little grim scary tale, enjoyed..

[Utkarsh Singh]

i'm happy u enjoyed it ......thanks for the review .:D

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome

[Utkarsh Singh]

................ :)