Dream In My Dream

" Dream In My Dream "

Every night I had a dream

A dream about you

It's not a dream of love

Or romance  with you

But , in which you are remorselessly slayed

By those four men appareled in black

 

I can remember your dark red eyes

Filled with tear and anguish

Pink nose and grinding teeth

As they are going to crunch each other

Your grim pale face

Justifying the dry cold blood

It's a panorama of midnight park 

you were on foot and I was in a car

walking alone , you asked me for a lift  

when I just ignored you and passed by 

HELP ME !  as you cried

still resonating in my head, since that night 

Who are you ? why you visit my dream ?

Are you some evil spirit or just an incubus ?

I never met you or ever seen you

Then why ? why you disturb my kip ?

I beg you, leave my soul and my mind

Please leave me alone

It's been a week

Since you last retreated my dream

But wait , what's this ?

Why this background is changing itself 

Oh ! no , it's the same dream 

it's a dream in my dream 

~uTkArSh SiNgH

Reviews

[Puffle]

When I read the first two lines I was all like "UUuuhhhh....O_O" but then I continued and I was going "OH!" XD I'm such a dork....

But, anyway, really interesting poem! I started getting in to it and was really intrigued O_O What inspired you to write something like this?

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks CC .......what inspired me i think my nightmares .......i just convert them into a poem and add a character to it ........just as simple as that ..........:)

[Puffle]

Interesting O_O I take my random nightmares and throw them into a random plot, then never turn into much of anything, I have a huge box in my room full of random notes etc, I should really put more up here...O_o

[Utkarsh Singh]

its a matter of talent ...i can convert them into poems you convert them into notes .....better to take a plot then fix your nightmare into that and you will see birth of a small ,boring line .....
by the way i think that i should also note my nightmare somewhere........heheh ....:D

[Puffle]

I'm not much of a poem person, I tend to lean towards fiction writing. Although, somehow, I earned first place in a Youth Writing contest for a Churches of God thing O_o No clue how I managed that, but ANYWHO

[Utkarsh Singh]

congo .....:D

[Puffle]

.....? O_o

[Utkarsh Singh]

earned first place in a Youth Writing contest for a Churches of God ..:P

[gabrielle]

At first, i thought that the piece is about being haunted by conscience for not rendering help to someone screaming for it but i was mistaken. You were able to depict a haunting dream.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot angina......:)

[Lonely Scorpio Girl]

What a gruesome nightmare! Good work.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thank you LSG ........ :D

[Frieda P]

Rather disturbing dream/like poetry here...I sure hope you didn't actually pass someone by who was screaming help me.....an affecting read.

[Utkarsh Singh]

no ....i had never ever passed anyone screaming for help .....just a character of my imagination ....... thanks for the stop and for the review .......:)

[TheSearcher]

I only live in my dreams of reality, rather face the nightmares of fantasy.
Reality;obvious answers, Fantasy;none of your control.
-TheSearcher.

I like the poem. That dream i always get whenever i sleep early, like very early.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks TS /.......

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was such and interesting and thought provoking pen U Singh :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot vidya ...........for a lovely review ......... :D

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Honey-Bee]

Cool! A dream in a dream. You can't get any deeper than that. Good work!

[Utkarsh Singh]

your are insulting me or provoking me to write poems with more depth .............hehe just kidding ............ :)......you know i can get even more deeper ...."I DREAM IN MY DREAM WAS IN MY DREAM "...........hehehe ...lols ......thanks for the review .......:D

[yuki]

I can remember your dark red eyes
Filled with tear and anguish
Pink nose and grinding teeth
As they are going to crunch each other
Your grim pale face
Justifying the dry cold blood

this reminds me of a vampire but other then that very nicely done :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

now i can also imagine a vampi after reading your review ....... ;) lols ....actually it's telling the facial expression when the girl was killed ..... :)......thanks for review ... :D

[just Penny]

A dark, sinister tale, reminded me of the four horsemen of the apocalypse. I like your final lines - chaos and torment work really well. Nicely done. Penny

[Utkarsh Singh]

i'm glad you like the chaos ........i think poems has done its job .... ;).....thanks a lot penny .... :D

[Ruth]

Suffocating...whatever our beliefs about dreams, always something to take from them and think about - cleverly done hon and vivid imagery x

[Utkarsh Singh]

i think its an easy way to write a poem ......;) thanks for the review poppy . :D