Dream In My Dream

" Dream In My Dream "

Every night I had a dream

A dream about you

It's not a dream of love

Or romance  with you

But , in which you are remorselessly slayed

By those four men appareled in black

 

I can remember your dark red eyes

Filled with tear and anguish

Pink nose and grinding teeth

As they are going to crunch each other

Your grim pale face

Justifying the dry cold blood

It's a panorama of midnight park 

you were on foot and I was in a car

walking alone , you asked me for a lift  

when I just ignored you and passed by 

HELP ME !  as you cried

still resonating in my head, since that night 

Who are you ? why you visit my dream ?

Are you some evil spirit or just an incubus ?

I never met you or ever seen you

Then why ? why you disturb my kip ?

I beg you, leave my soul and my mind

Please leave me alone

It's been a week

Since you last retreated my dream

But wait , what's this ?

Why this background is changing itself 

Oh ! no , it's the same dream 

it's a dream in my dream 

~uTkArSh SiNgH

Reviews

[Puffle]

When I read the first two lines I was all like "UUuuhhhh....O_O" but then I continued and I was going "OH!" XD I'm such a dork....

But, anyway, really interesting poem! I started getting in to it and was really intrigued O_O What inspired you to write something like this?

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks CC .......what inspired me i think my nightmares .......i just convert them into a poem and add a character to it ........just as simple as that ..........:)

[Puffle]

Interesting O_O I take my random nightmares and throw them into a random plot, then never turn into much of anything, I have a huge box in my room full of random notes etc, I should really put more up here...O_o

[Utkarsh Singh]

its a matter of talent ...i can convert them into poems you convert them into notes .....better to take a plot then fix your nightmare into that and you will see birth of a small ,boring line .....
by the way i think that i should also note my nightmare somewhere........heheh ....:D

[Puffle]

I'm not much of a poem person, I tend to lean towards fiction writing. Although, somehow, I earned first place in a Youth Writing contest for a Churches of God thing O_o No clue how I managed that, but ANYWHO

[Utkarsh Singh]

congo .....:D

[Puffle]

.....? O_o

[Utkarsh Singh]

earned first place in a Youth Writing contest for a Churches of God ..:P

[lord]

nice well done...it feels good reading ur poems

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

OMG, this poem was amazing and brilliantly well written.

Kaze~ :-)

[Luna Zerimar]

This was horrifying!

Loved the font you used also. It made it even creepier!

(Sorry for being SO late.)

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks jessica ........interesting review .... (y)

[Kamari's]

Lol inception I'm sorry I like this but reminded me of inception I'm on a goofiness thing from reading request but this one was very creative well done !

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot dear........
sorry for the late reply

[New Theory]

Loved this poem, the gothic feel of the write is pretty evident, with the imagery really complimenting the dream, of a dark gloomy road. Good job, you are improving at super speed.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot NT /......."super speed"......liked that comment...............;)

[New Theory]

you are welcome :)

[Mirra]

Yeah there are some dreams where you see faces of strangers maybe it mean something. Anyway enjoyed this one. Well done dear!

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks INK ......:D

[Skai Rain]

Freaked me out a bit at first, glad I kept reading though. Quite the philosophical poem here. Good job!

[Utkarsh Singh]

hahaha .....freaked never meant to do so .....btw thanks for review

[deepika]

very nice read.. the last para is amazing. however, the last line in the second last para kinda disturbed the flow, you may think differently. Just my opinion. loved your poem.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks for the feedback deepika......:D

[Ashleigh Molina]

I liked it! It was haunting but still beautiful. It flowed nicely

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks for the beautiful review Ashleigh

[vaishnavi]

nice piece of writing and a very catchy title like it :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanks a lot vaish ........:D..........finally i got your review ....... ;)

[vaishnavi]

yes actually it doesn't means all the time that we read a poem or a piece of writing we should review that particular lines on every poem it is just there are no words for such poems because they are beyond the words