EXAM'S FRIGHT

ExAm'S FrIgHt

Returning from the party night

feeling a bit naughty right

threw my clothes here and there

as they were scattered every where

Party makes me so much tired

like a worker who was hired

so i fall down like a dead

with a pillow below my head

Woke up on my goosy bed

like an irritated angry lad

noticing it was a next day

the morning of the monday

The clock do the ticky ticks

wake me up sharp at six

i threw it down so hard

it sound thud hud thard

I was on my daily schedule

and was late for the school

so; had a feathery breakfast

took the shortest track so fast

As i reached to the school

it was the day to be a final fool

since we partied all the night 

got no time to study tight

My heart beat fasten

and body sweatens 

opened my eyes so bright

actually it was the EXAM'S FRIGHT

As i looked at the clock 

which gives me a little shock

its still clocking 1 am 

but reminds me about 8 pm

I lie down brave 

on my goosy grave

with my eyes close and shut 
waiting for another cut.

~utkarsh singh

Author's Note

guyz my frst poem ..plz ignore silly mistakes.....

Reviews

[Thea]

This was entertaining. I remembered a friend who experienced the same thing. Hahaha. Must be really hard. I actually like the topic you have in here. However, the rhyme appeared rather forced. I'm sure you can do better with your vocabulary. Nonetheless, I enjoyed this one. Thank you for sharing. :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

it was my first poem ......try to understand ...you can check out my last poem " dream in my dream ".i think improvement is shown up there ....btw thanks for the review

[Thea]

I totally understand you, dear. As what I said, I know that you can do better. I was just trying to help you by noting an honest criticism. I personally liked this poem so don't worry about it. Keep writing.

[AprilRN1210]

I like your story-telling in this one.. It had me giggling in places.. I would have to say again on this one--watch your rhymes they "feel" forced. You capitalize "I" in some parts and not others.. Overall it is entertaining and humorous..

[Utkarsh Singh]

aarrreeee........ it was my first poem naa ....so there is so much error ......

[AprilRN1210]

I agree, but the beauty is that you can always go back and "tweak" places as you learn and grow as a writer... I am only trying to give you my honest opinion.. That is what I want, so I therefore, give it to others.. It is how we can learn from each other and become better writers, no? Looking back at some of my first few pieces I laugh.. but enjoy now, going back and editing them and allowing them to be the shining star hidden among the potential..

[Utkarsh Singh]

hmmm .,........i never thought about it ......quite interesting ......thank you ...... :D

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome... this one does have a LOT of potential and I am not just saying that.. If you ever need any help or advice, I am always willing to lend a hand, or ear... :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

help ....... always..... even now ....plz help me ........:( .......and i think hand is better than ear ....... ;)

[AprilRN1210]

hmmm, ok I will message you some of my thoughts and opinions on what can be "tweaked"... again just my opinion, but hopefully can steer you in the right direction.. :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

kk thanks a lot .......:D....so caring

[AprilRN1210]

ok, I sent to you.. you are more than welcome...

[Namrata]

Your first poem ? Tells me how much the exam fear stroke you, lol.

[Utkarsh Singh]

mmm namrata ...its just a trailer ......picture to abhi baki hai mere dost .......;)

[New Theory]

Was a fun read, good job Utkarsh. I never had exam fright.. I could hardly give a fish about it when I was in grad school. Yet I have seen my friends and know your description are really entertaining. Good one keep it coming.

[Utkarsh Singh]

thanx NT n i will try ma best ,...thank you very much

[New Theory]

you are welcome

[Rachelle]

LOL! No worries, Utkarsh, even after grad school, I still get nightmares about exams!

[Utkarsh Singh]

really ?.... same here ..these exam are even more scary than ghost

[Rachelle]

They have me breaking into sweat….:D

[Utkarsh Singh]

that's why the are ghost... .;lols.... ;)

[Rachelle]

It would be worse if you're the teacher and you get nightmares about your own exams...

[Utkarsh Singh]

teachers also get nitmare about exam ??......a gud topic for poem .. :D

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha I really enjoyed this it was very funny :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

ty vey much ...revued sm as i expected..ty

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome.Keep writing you are good :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

ya sure .......will set it as a reminder....... ;)