Up Comes Down

a poem named after me...

Up

Side

Down,

 

In

Side

Out,

 

What

Happens

When,

 

We're all

found

out?

 

Do

We

Run?

 

Do

We

Hide?

 

From

What's

On,

 

The

In-

Side?

Reviews

[Cherry Nyberg]

To the eye you can see the offbeat of "we're all" since everything else is just one word per line, but when you read it aloud, and perhaps it's just me, but it flows together just fine. I think it makes up for itself since you cut "inside" in half, so when you read it it has the right beat.
I find this piece particularly interesting. Alongside with the photo, you could take it as a dramatic love story. At least, I did. I could infer little things to make it such. I think you did a pretty awesome job on this.
-Cherry Nyberg

[Tallulah]

Short but very powerful. Great message. Its written very well and i love the structure. Great job.

[UpComesDown]

yes i noticed the small offbeatness... thanks

[Ophelia]

I like your style. There are so many unique styles people have on this website. I really enjoyed reading this. You should definately keep writing.

There were a few parts that seemed off beat, but it's not too noticeable. Keep up the good work!