Hidden Away

I have this mask.

I covers me, Ingulfs me.

As long as it's there

no one can see.

 

It shows a long lost girl,

happy and care-free.

A little Me-Girl of my past.

One that disapeared to me.

 

(now and then)

 

It hurts and I need it.

I can't let them see how it hurts.

They can't see

how it lurks.

 

I don't want them to worry;

They don't need to see me cry,

but I need a release

from living this lie.

 

(i need someone)

 

I strike a match

to hide the darkness,

but my light is only a mask

to hide my blackness.

 

I'm like a disease:

stuck in qurantine.

Hiding from others

leaves me weak in the knees.

 

(to help me.)

 

If you read this and you understand,

be my escape, and hold me hand.

 

(please.)

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

I simply love pieces that refer to the masks we wear, though the tone of this one is very sad. I tend to mention plastic smiles here and there, a reference to those almost transparent masks available around Halloween. Those fake little smiles that we put on for others, so we can hide ourselves. It is normally the last thing I put on in the morning when I am getting ready and before I head out the door.

[QuietPoet]

I liked this.. So sad.. And it catches you. Great write.

[UpComesDown]

I'm really surprised that this was considered good i didn't really like it but you know if i think about it i dont really like my writing... i just wanted to see if people thought the same about them... Thanks everyone maybe now I will put up a bunch more... ^.^

I really like this poem because I can relate to it.

[Save the Trees, Save th..]

ME likey this i shall be your escape. lol

[Arsenic]

Hmm, interesting topic. I like the flow of the poem. The information in parentheses, while being a cool effect serves only to disturb the poems flow. You also might improve your word choice. I don't know wether you wanted to improve it or not but if you were I hope that this helps.

[UpComesDown]

Not one of my best...