Being in a tree

A poem about searching yourself and the similarities between humans and animals.

I was searching me that’s all I know

Searching the one I’ll be tomorrow

So I’ve swum through a sea and tried climbing this tree and right in the crown I’ve found me

There was a bird and of course it didn’t had a pensive face

But without any thoughts it seemed happy in its place

I starred at dark brown plumage and little black eyes

And afer a while I started talking with this bird by my side:

"What can I learn from such a tiny little being?

What can you see that I’m not seeing?

Maybe sometimes it is enough just to be

As easy as 'You’ll do you & I’ll do me'

but then again who am I by being me?

Am I like you, just another being in a tree?"

Author's Note

Please correct my mistakes (:

Reviews

[nrshrews]

AWESOME!!!


but its nitpicking time. on the 11th line, quotation marks maybe around You'll do you and I'll do me.

9th line you could be asking 2 similar sounding but slightly different questions.
You could be sayiing What can you see THAT im not seeing, or you could be like responding to the bird, saying something that means "Really? You can see what I cannot. In which case, a comma after the first word will completely change the meaning.

nitpicking done I gave you 100/100 cu it was well written, flowed and was entertaining

[Untalented Creation]

Thanks. I really appreciate your comment and "that" in the 9th line sounds better (: Thanks again

[nrshrews]

Hey, is there any chance you could look at one of my stories? nobody's looked at them or reviewed them yet at all.

[Great Aunt Astri]

I have a Norwegian Aunt. Whenever she realised what she was doing she would say "Now I have found me"!
As for the animals. They must be evolving. I wonder if they will ever be able to communicate with us?
Do you mean 'stared' or 'steered'. instead of starred? Oh English is a funny language!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the flow of thoughts leading to the very good ending.
"As easy as 'You’ll do you & I’ll do me'
but then again who am I by being me?
Am I like you, just another being in a tree?""
Good to be a tree. Reaching for the gods and trying to grasp hope. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[V]

I like the strain of thoughts, the natural image about it.

[SleeplessVolcano]

I just did that yesterday....climbing that tree.....though I did check for snakes first....:)

Delightful writing!

You need to change your nickname......you are very talented! (Maybe just in denial) :)

[Untalented Creation]

Thanks. That's really sweet of you. I think that talent doesn't really matter. Nobody needs to be as good as J.K.Rowling to inspire people.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Personally I do not think JK Rowling is that good. She brought out a range of books at the right time and the right place, so as a businessperson she is fantastic......but what she did is within our grasp too......

[Untalented Creation]

Nice thought. I'm really wondering what you would think about my last short story. Btw. I can't find your poem about climbing that tree :/ Can u send me a link?

[SleeplessVolcano]

Let me check it out....:)......i did not write a poem about the tree experience yet.....it is just what I did.....

[Untalented Creation]

Gosh, I'm so absent-minded ^^ You're work is brilliant though

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thank you for the compliment........about being absent-minded.....welcome to the club.....:)