Pain and Sorrow

You struck me with words of hatred,

Crushed my dreams in the palm of your hand,

I was blamed for your failures,

You were all I desired,

What I lived for,

What I strived for,

You traded off the love I gave to you,

Tears stream like waterfalls down the side of my face,

I’ve had enough with the pain you’ve put me through,

You treated me as if I were a toddlers toy

I stand crying by this empty window,

My heart falling to pieces,

I place my memories on a shelf,

For all to remember,

Shattering the guilt that I had ever said to you,

That I had ever done to you,

Erasing this lifetime of hopes and dreams,

Putting me to peace and tranquility,

I rest as if I were a newborn resting in her crib,

That bond between us that used to be so strong,

Has been severed for all of eternity.

Reviews

[Patricia]

Very emotional piece of poetry. I like the little slaps in the face that you give the subject, the honesty is touching and dramatic. Though I would change the wording in the third line to last you use the word rest and resting, it would be better to change one of the two to a different word cuz it kind of interrupts the flow and you shouldn't try to repeat a word in the same line or in the whole poem for that matter unless it is intentional. But overall I love the passion in this poem and pain is evident and has a bit of anger in it which I always love to feel it beneath the love loss. :)

[Aura Devour]

Sad and beautiful.. loved it

[Kamari's]

Dark and sad yet unique your stanzas are well put together and the description if the pain and sorrow how refreshing tears of waterfall ha I love it you have grand potential of a great poet keep writing and I am sorry for who ever made you feel this way yet the way you expressed the pain and the grief is so familiar it connects me with the story well done

[Brandon M. Mitchell]

Thank you so much :)

[thatemogirl16]

i loved this poem. it was very vivid when describing how you felt in all different ways. Well done!